Comment from author about the poem: I dont like haiku or any other intrusion of arithmetic into the art which is poetry. For me poetry should be pure expression of feeling which arithmetic is not LOL... but sometimes you just have to have a go dontcha? Couldn't resist the picture. Have a great weekend.
Indeed less is sometimes more, I adore 5/7/5 because they are challenging, as you have to.pack.it all in the 17 syllables and you have not only done it but you have done it with humour lol 😂 I hope to see more.of these.from you dearest dusk. 💖
I probably will but i'm being told off cos haikus are subject specific apparently.... arithmetic was never my strong point. Until japanese calculators came along, now it's japanese poetry... Ah-so.
Excellent job! I think haiku/senryu is difficult because a whole completed message/story has to be packed into 17 syllables as Teddy said. But it can be stunning. Cute pictures too.
Haiku - 5/7/5 written about Nature#
Senryu - 5/7/5 written about emotion
Goldliku 5/7/5 written by me when not either a haiku or senryu.
So this one could be a duskiku - a new form of 5/7/5. LOL
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Indeed less is sometimes more, I adore 5/7/5 because they are challenging, as you have to.pack.it all in the 17 syllables and you have not only done it but you have done it with humour lol 😂 I hope to see more.of these.from you dearest dusk. 💖
It was that dawg in the pictures inspired me. Look at his eyes when the chick bit his tongue LOL.
Word
You cut deep bro.
I blame the dawg!
Truth
Very nice Haiku and cute pictures to boot! Great job!
I'll try anything for a laugh.
not that bad is it?
writing haikus can be fun!
so why not write more?
I probably will but i'm being told off cos haikus are subject specific apparently.... arithmetic was never my strong point. Until japanese calculators came along, now it's japanese poetry... Ah-so.
I write loads but I call them 575s to avoid the purists having a go. Could call them senrykus I suppose.
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Excellent job! I think haiku/senryu is difficult because a whole completed message/story has to be packed into 17 syllables as Teddy said. But it can be stunning. Cute pictures too.
I might have to stay with limericks.
Haiku - 5/7/5 written about Nature#
Senryu - 5/7/5 written about emotion
Goldliku 5/7/5 written by me when not either a haiku or senryu.
So this one could be a duskiku - a new form of 5/7/5. LOL
Andy
Would you settle for a dyslexiku?
Defo, less is best, and that's just the maths part.
Less maths suits me fine.
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