You do not do,
Not do happy.
You do not do,
Not do remorse.
Knot nine yards of yarn around
My frail body
No, you do not do,
Not do.
Questions have answers;
But with you I’m through.
You do not do,
Not do simple things.
You do not do,
Do not like words other than, “You”
“I love YOU”
“I know YOU”
“A E I O YOU”
Take back your yarn, pick up your mess.
You do not do,
Not do.
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Author:
Rocky Lagou (
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- Comment from author about the poem: While my poetic brain is currently lounging in a bougie spa trying to recover from writer's block, I present to you this poem I wrote a few months ago. This one is truly a sort of playful and frisky poem but it does have an underlying meaning: PEOPLE NEED TO STOP THINKING ONLY ABOUT THEMSELVES. It's actually funny because you know how researches say that sometimes we're subliminally inspired from things we've already seen or experienced and output that, well....I realized only AFTER writing this poem that the title and the whole refrain "you do not do, not do," was actually indirectly inspired from Sylvia Plath's iconic poem "Daddy" in which she begins the poem with: "You do not do, you do not do Any more, black shoe In which I have lived like a foot" When I re-read that line I literally looked at the screen and just though: "Oooohhhh, that's where my inspo came from." Crazy, right?
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This is not not cool Rocky
Hehe, you're such a funny one Saxon! Smart. I was actually thinking of writing a poem called "I'm Not Not a Poet." And center it on the fact that we're all poets even if we don't think so. I'm glad you enjoyed my lighthearted post, it's playful but it also speaks to that message of acceptance and forgiveness.
A fine write Rocky.
A bit like 'Why does 'tomorrow' never come? When it gets here it's 'today'! Hmm, strange that.
You seen any 'tomorrows' around?
I talk some rubbish sometimes! lol.
Hehe, omg Orchi that was actually such a clever jest. Your always so witty! True though, why does "tomorrow" never arrive, really strange indeed. Nonetheless, really glad you enjoyed the poem and have a beautiful day!
Thanks R.
I love the rhythm and repetition. I could see this being a poem that is required reading in high school lit/ college. I really love this! I can't wait to see what you write when your creative mind returns from the spa. Sometimes we just need breaks and there is nothing wrong with that. Maybe go people watching or take a walk in nature to inspire you? I personally paint when I need inspiration. Maybe it will work for you too? I love your writing! It's very inspiring. Never stop expressing your beautiful creative mind.
Hi Destiny, thank you so so much for such kindhearted words. I'm glad you noted the "rhythm and repetition" of this piece as that is what I wanted to stand out the most. I wanted it to be playful and almost sing-song like. I'm truly delighted to see you enjoyed and connected with it. I also hope that my poetic brain will return soon, there's nothing wrong with breaks at all, just waiting though...In the meantime, I'm peacefully enjoying my imaginary steam bath at the "bougie spa" haha! Have a great day!
Great poem!! I love how i had to think about the meaning of it to fully understand. Can't wait for more. And as for the lack of inspo... sounds weird, but if you have TikTok or Insta, browse through the stuff and find one thing unjust or sad about society today. Then write about it! I don't think poems have to be about anything grand, they just have to be from the heart.
So True Natalia, the world is pretty messed up and anything on social media is bound to spark some inspiration. Your words are truly sincere and wise, "write from the heart," I will surely do so. Thanks so much for the care, have a wonderful day!
Of course and you do the same!!
You have phrased this refrain so cleverly, and I naturally fall into the cadence as I read it. I think the most fun you can have with words is to play with them, and you my friend do this beautifully.
Oh Bella, many many thanks! I'm very glad that you noted the "cadence" of the poem, I feel that when we allow ourselves to play with words then we can create something very rhythmic and bouncy. Thanks again and have a lovely day!
Muse like seasons shall strike you
Maybe like a gentle breeze shall pay you
Await its arrival
Welcome with greet
Cause when she arrives
You may not have peace
But I really liked this light hearted poetry
And the writer’s note added to my thoughts
Good one dear Rocky…
Thanks so much Spiller for your encouraging words. I'm feeling better already with my writer's block. I wrote 3 poems yesterday, a record for me. Really glad you enjoyed the playfulness of the poem, I wanted it to be almost "bouncy" and delicate. But the meaning stays true, sometimes others can "kill us softly" like the metaphor of the "nine yards of yarn" being wrapped around the speaker's "frail body." Have a great day!
It's very catching! You've got me singing this while I was sweeping the room. You do not do, not do.......!
Hehe, thanks so much Rozina for the funny reply. It is pretty sing-songy and I'm glad the poem transmitted that to you. I love the idea of someone doing some tedious domestic chore but lightening it up by reciting my poem. Hehe. You're so kind, have a lovely day!
Love this Rocky!
Thanks a bunch Tallis! I hope I made you feel the "flow" of the poem. Also the message, that we must be careful with our "comfort zones" because although we may feel comfortable around someone, they can be manipulating you to think that way. Much love, and have a good day!
You do not do , not do, the things they want to do to you
They do not do, not do, what they should not do too!
Especially if they do not do, not do, around half past two
Cause that’s the time they do not, not do, make me a brew!
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What Knot should I not have in this wonderful lot of not knots. LOL
Andy
Hehe, Andy you've truly written a golden comment. Thanks so much poet buddy for "flowing" with my poem. Really glad you enjoyed, have a wonderful day!
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