Do you not hear the bell, brother?
Is it he?
Are you expecting someone for dinner,
Magerie?
Oh, how can you not remember?
It's the 30 th of September!
A slight breeze tickles the leaves,
and catches her hair before it leaves.
Samuel would be visiting today.
Samuel Baker, do you say?
Yes tis he. Its like I could see him again,
his crystal blue eyes glistening in the rain.
As raindrops slide down his ruffled hair,
and reach his cherry lips that swear,
I promise to meet your beloved brother,
and confess the subject to our hearts so dear.
I'll be there love, don't you fear,
On the 30 th of this September!
Her brown eyes lighten,
and her smile brightens.
I'll lay out the table,
Call me if it's Samuel.
He shakes his head with a heavy sigh,
and goes back to reading ,"The wonder of lies".
Her ears flush and perks up,
her heart's beating fast, lub dub.
Brother, dost thou hear?
Is it a carriage drawing near?
No, my dear, replied her brother,
Not a thing I hear.
Brother, ready is the tea,
He gets up and looks at her inquiringly.
Won't you join me dear?
Oh, don't you worry about me.
I am waiting for he.
She sits on the porch
eyes fixed on the road,
relentless and unblinking with hope.
What? But how could he ?
It's been more than a year,
He has departed, you've got to move on dear!
She continues to watch the road
Unaffected and unfazed by his words.
As his face fills with guilt,
which a crime of past has built,
his lips move in a whisper,
Forgive me, my dear sister.
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Author:
JudyStella (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: June 19th, 2022 10:19
- Comment from author about the poem: A promise is not meant to be broken. This is the first time I wrote a poem in the narrative style with a conversational tone adapted, inspired by the lovely creations of the community. I am sorry for the length😅 If there are any questions, feel free to ask!
- Category: Love
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Comments12
I am so glad you got the story!Thankyou so much for taking the time to read!
Beautiful, Judy, this works so well, I think you have managed to ignite the readers imagination!
Love it!
Thankyou so much! An awaited comment as your narrative poems inspired me to try this style. I am so glad you like it!!❤️
Wow, I am so honoured, thank you! I think you outshine me in most areas though!
OMG, you are too kind😅 Thank you so much for the flattering comment but honestly I can never match your mastery! Hoping to see more of your poems❤️
Methinks you are the kind one! Hope you are ok, I’m hearing things are not so good at your location. Please be ok!
Yeah, things are a bit tough right now with the economy being unstable but I am okay. Hope things will be alright soon! Thankyou so much for being considerate! I really appreciate it❤️
Very nicely done. Not too long at all.
Thankyou so much! I was worried about the length, now I am at ease❤️
It's always a pleasure to read your poems. You manage to built this one up very well. It's a really nice story. Though i feel sorry for the sister waiting on someone she'll never see again, she was so enthusiastic. From what i can tell it's her brother who killed her lover, right? Sad and well constructed! Beautifuly done!
Aww Thankyou so much! You also have the nicest things to say❤️ Yes you got it! Her brother killed her lover because of a caste issue and now he regrets it as she keeps on waiting on him. Thankyou so much for commenting! I am glad you like it!
A sad story, but very well penned Judy. 😉
Thankyou so much!!😊
Beautiful!!! Absolutely love this!!!!
Thankyou so much for your kind comment!! I really appreciate it❤️
Lovely write and I love the narrative!! Very cool to see on this site.
Thankyou so much for your comment! The conversational style used in your poems also helped me in the creation of this poem!
Honored to be thought of! Keep doing what you do
Will do😊
I was just on your site and decided to read and glad I did, I liked your poem broken promises. it was a nice write between a brother and sister. nicely penned.
Thankyou so much! I am really glad you liked it!
your so very welcome, I like your style and rhyme to your poems.
Glad to hear🥰
Wow its a fantastic story poem mod ballad like, sad ending, narrated in creative classic rhyming and language. Kudos!
Plz also read and comment on my newest poem
Thankyou so much for your kind comment! I’ll check it out for sure!
Beautifully written 👏 ❤
Thankyou so much 😊
A very captivating poem proposes many interesting questions.
Thankyou so much!
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