The Unsaid of Ever Consuming Stress

sussanwrites2025

As much as I try I can’t get it right

The stress of it all makes me fall

Into the deep hole of disappointment 

I can try and try to keep myself steady

I mentally prepare myself 

I'm not ready

To let down everyone else

Because in myself I see 

Failure

But if I try I know I can make it 

But Thinking I’ll  fail I think I’ll fake it

It’s easier that way 

Instead of making myself prey 

Of failure and stress

How did I get myself into this mess 

Consumed by the never-ending decision making 

One wrong move and it’s over

Stuck with the mess of stress that made me guess

 the wrong answer

When I pause to think as a deer that looks in the headlights 

Frozen with fear 

Frozen like ice 

Stuck in the worrisome of my thoughts eliminating every option that could cause trouble

So in the end I won't end up like a mound of the ruble 

Like in a war zone 

After a deadly attack and I'm the only survivor 

But my internal organs collapse and they say "Revive her!" 

All because I made the wrong decision

It's not a big deal

But others will say it is 

But I hold my future in my hands

And I won't allow things to happen 

That I do not want

The stress will not cover my eyes 

And I will fly to the end of the world 

To accomplish what I want in life

Because in the end 

I will not sit back and watch life happen

But I want to run in an exciting fashion

Because if I tried till now I will continue to try even if the stress is overwhelming 

Because in the end, I'm just a plain dress covered in the mess of stress 

 

 

  • Author: sussanwrites2025 (Offline Offline)
  • Published: April 15th, 2023 11:11
  • Category: Reflection
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  • Bobby O

    Stuck with the mess of stress that made me guess. Strong line w a good cadence elevating simple rhyme to punctuate with meaning. Nice. However, the piece I diluted in part due to sentence structure in some of the other phrasing. Edgar Allan Poe once stated that the overuse of the personal pronoun “I” tends to suggest that there is a rewrite effort available that works around the overuse and the result rewards with a stringer presentation of a solid idea. Rewrite rewrite rewrite is many a poets advice to sharpen and add intensity. Don’t mean to sound like my take is definitive, I merely share what I learned from people way smarter than I. It’s a trap I’ve fallen into many a time but find it’s usually worth it to rephrase those parts. Please know I mean well and am far from expert so ignoring me is reasonable.

    • sussanwrites2025

      Omg, thank you for the advice! I like constructive criticism since it's always what makes me better. And who doesn't want advice from Mr. Poe? Thank you!

      • Bobby O

        Certainly above my skill to offer critique, I nettle was sharing what was shared w me in the past. I still hesitate though cuz it’s tricky. But you are extra cool



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