In So Few Words Gone
I seriously hope
the arrival
of the text I am
about to send
does not disturb
you from
your slumbers ..
But rather,
when you do
come to find it,
in the morning
that is ..
You shall feel
obliged
and otherwise
compelled
to stand before
your great
grandmothers
tall cheval mirror
and read
each word aloud ..
Louder
than a whisper
or indeed
a prayer even ..
Since by then,
I most sincerely
hope, I shall
be well and truly gone
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Author:
Neville (
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I hope not Neville.
Andy
I suppose 'gone' at the end of the day is a relative concept ..
Good write Neville.
Ahh, part of my farewell speech to KP, this is. I've packed me bags; I've had enough! lol. How will I get anywhere? She's had all me dosh for botox!
.... because ya worth it 🐀🐧
Goodbye KP. I dunno if it is KP now, with all that trout-stuff she has!
'compelled
to stand before
your great
grandmothers
tall cheval mirror
and read
each word aloud ..
Louder
than a whisper
or indeed
a prayer even ..'
pulls at those empathy heartstrings
even devoid of full clarity to meaning
the electric intimacy and sparkling imagery
insures these words resonate, deep
brilliantly executed, Hyung
(I read and learn)
I am sure you could teach me a thing or two .. indeed you have .. just saying .. Cheers 🙂
a complimentary brotherhood, how poetic
in these times of rife, manic neuroticism
what a precious gift to treasure, Hyung
cheers 🍻
thank you! for being, You
"In So Few Words Gone" is a beautifully crafted poem that explores the themes of legacy, memory, and mortality.
You sure know how to put a smile on an old scribblers face, thanks Mott 🐧
Ohh, why do I turn up sometimes to comment, and talk rubbish?! There are some educated comments here. What would I know about them?! lol.
Gone and Neville I sincerely hope are exclusive of each other. 😉
got a plane to catch but back in a week or thereabouts thanks AP 🙂
Ok, that explains the "Gone", I look forward to a "Returned" 🙂
Sounds like having to drop something and be farthest away possible from ground zero!
having dropped something maybe .. and then dunna arunna ... perhaps 🙂
Sounds like a bitter end to a relationship, by text no less. Your poem paints a clear image of one anxious to get out of town, and hopeful to leave behind a bit of bitterness. Love that he wants her to look in the mirror. A bit of reflection never hurts. - Phil A.
Cheers mate, that's one way of looking at it Phil .. I've neva written lol before so this is a first, because I just did 🙂
I could take the meaning of the poem several ways and I think you are just gone, as in leaving. I'm so glad you'll be back!!
Just got back C .. cheers💜
Well and truly gone. I’m still mulling that end but can report w glee the cadence and motion of the piece was excellent and compelling bc and shall remain forever so not withstanding my recognition that is slow to digest that one moment.
No worries, or problem nor rush .. I am grateful for the visit no less .. Always welcome and they never come more grateful than me sir .. Neville
My great grandmothers tall cheval mirror has just informed me it will have nothing to do with your travels in these uncertain times, accepts no liability for any misadventure which may befall....... However since you a have returned, I suppose I should add that it was an intriguing write, Sir, and be assured I was not disturbed.........
.............................. Phew .. wot a relief .... 🙂
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