I feel empty.
Not empty like a cookie jar
Little crumbs left behind
A clear absence of something that used to be there
Yet still filled with lingering scents of chocolate and caramel
And memories of joy and excitement
Patiently awaiting the arrival of newly baked goods and loving hands to put them there.
No, I feel empty like a deserted house
With memories stuck to the walls like plaster
Forever clinging on no matter how hard you try to remove it
A house so hollow any sound echos through the hallways
Getting louder and louder until the windows rattle and its foundation shakes and you're scared the house might collapse
For any furnishing has rotten away long ago, leaving only moldy skeletons behind.
I wish I was empty like a cookie jar.
But I will forever remain the deserted house
Too damaged for anyone to take an interest in
Too fragile to handle it if anyone does
And thus destined for a future of further decay
Forever hollow, desolate, and empty
Until finally, I collapse.
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Author:
Dreamer (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: September 8th, 2023 17:31
- Category: Reflection
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Comments4
Such a tight metaphor. I walked thru the house through your description and felt sad about how you feel. It really is so well written displays a versatile thought provoking talent that I will be anxious to catch up on your past offerings and will look forward to future pieces.
Nice write great read
Thank you, those are really high compliments!
Deserving
Tremendous write
I think we have all felt that way at some point
Almost heard the echo of the windows and foundations shaking
Pleasure to read
Thank you, that means a lot
Miss Dreamer, get those thoughts out of your head girl! You are a beautiful person inside and out, I resonate with you so much
But there is hope and you are more precious than gold , you have purpose and a beautiful soul,hang in there girl,you are full of life and we love you, we're your MPS family
I know I never replied to this comment, but I keep coming back to it when I need a little reminder. So thank you for leaving it here for me to visit, I really appreciate it
Absolutely, if you ever need to talk I'm here for you!
Rich and deep
Thank you
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