Time eroded memories

sorenbarrett

Built in drifts forming dunes
Memory's blowing sands
Piled eternity's echoed tunes
Dust of time flows through my hands

Drifting, shifting, billowing ground
Wind molded clouds of earth
As a mirage a father is found
Grains of the past mother of birth

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  • Teddy.15

    You have captured the very essence of this poem in the title, beautifully done 🌹

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank so much my friend I appreciate the supportive words.

    • Saleh Ben Saleh

      You have summarized life in a few words. Beautiful, well done.

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you for your most kind words of encouragement they mean a lot.

      • MendedFences27

        Do as we all do, embellish. Those "Time Eroded Memories" can be expanded and cleaned up and converted to poetry. Your poem states the truth and is therefore poetic. Loved it. - Phil A.

        • sorenbarrett

          You are too kind and it is most appreciated. Thank you

        • gray0328

          speaks to the fleeting nature of memories and how they shape our identity. Well Done Soren

          • sorenbarrett

            I thank you deeply for your most encouraging words of kindness.

          • Accidental Poet

            Hold onto those memories soren. 😊👍

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you so much Accidental for the review and kind wishes

            • Neville

              I have long found it helpful to take notes in order to help preserve situations, circumstances and events encountered along the way .. I now find it crucial .. lest we forget ..

              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks Neville I appreciate your reads and comments. Thought I would just tell you lest I forget.

              • Dan Williams

                From dust we came . . .Classy stuff, my friend.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you Dan for the read and most kind words they are appreciated

                • Goldfinch60

                  Wonderful view of life soren.

                  Andy

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Such a nice thing to say from such a positive person. Thanks Gold

                  • Tom Dylan

                    A fascinating piece, Soren. Love the imagery.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thank you so much Tom your words are appreciated.

                    • Bobby O

                      Wind molded clouds of earth —-
                      Greatly descriptive - and then you pinch home the point of it all. It has power

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you so much Bobby I appreciate your read and most kind comment.

                      • Bobby O

                      • Thomas W Case

                        Superb and powerful work. Magnificent.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you Thomas it's appreciated

                        • Vsevolod Fomin

                          You have a very interesting poetic rhythm in your poems, the lines rhyme through one, there is a melodiousness when you listen to the poems to yourself. The lines are a little longer at the end, which creates a strong pulse effect and creates an atmosphere of total immersion in the poem.

                          • sorenbarrett

                            You have an astute eye or rather ear. Thank you so much for the read and most kind words they are deeply valued.



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