GATHERING WONDER
A path unknown, a festive sojourn of wonder , this smile newly owned does possess guile to reach the top from way down under
Common parlance sets the perfect cover as curious or desired surprise defines for most who render Wonder
I seek to reach exotic heights rare as a Black Swan viewed through absent glare of pitch black night
A measured pleasure of euphoric bliss
I would ten times run fire gauntlets of mythical risks
A Celestial Odyssey proving surely , it exists
One more minute, one more smile my dream of holding wonder ceaselessly persists
Bobby O
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Bobby O (
Online) - Published: August 18th, 2024 21:20
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O Bobby!
Fascinating. Pity I'm so far lacking sleep by now that I cannot offer a decent critique. Interesting collection of phrases culling images while evoking sensory responses, yet leaving an uncertain conclusion tantalizing faintly on the tip of the tongue.
Oh Bobby you have hit upon a neglected topic. Wonder is what lies beneath most every poem, the core to all life's pleasures and yet like all key ingredients left unaddressed in attention given to the spices. Nicely said
Don’t be mad. Please. I hate Cat Stevens and I loved your last poem but the North south thing …. You know. How bout muscles to grin and then … proud to note when memories begin!
Just ignore me I’d also valid option.
Don’t be mad. Please. I hate Cat Stevens and I loved your last poem but the North south thing …. You know. How bout muscles to grin and then … proud to note when memories begin!
Just ignore me I’d also valid option.
Not mad at all a great option. Ever had those times when you reach the end of a poem and like a race just too tired to finish well. Well.. I assure you though I hadn't thought of the Cat until you brought him up, but makes sense. Oh well chalk one up to experience. Thanks Bobbie criticisms are welcome here (If they are constructive)
You wrote way above my threshold to critique , but even Dino De Laurentis messes around w alternate versions once in a while.
Mich respect
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