Remembering An Orange Room
Don’t ask me for how long,
I’m not sure these days ..
But for a while at least,
we lived, we ate,
we slept, breathed and we
made out in a small
orange room, that glowed
by the ocean,
at both ends, of those long
summer days ..
But then, all our shadows
became darker,
and without any warning
they came in off
our mountain and covertly
stole your last breath
and took all my sunbeams away ..
- Author: Neville ( Offline)
- Published: September 27th, 2024 06:09
- Category: Unclassified
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- Users favorite of this poem: Cheeky Missy, Accidental Poet
Comments8
A beautiful love story, Neville. The tragic twist did not take away its sweetness. Well, done.
Thanks loads Jez .. I very much appreciate the visit and support my friend .. Neville
Ahh, but at least you have the memories. 🌹
we do indeed don't we my friend .. 🌹
Memories are better that nothing. 😉👍
Correct me iffen I'm mistaken, but the reference specifically to an orange room seems reminiscent of the '60's or '70's, rendering this delightful tribute to former days all the more winsome. Frankly, having considered it further I'm reminded of my long since departed adopted grandmother's house-- the walls were a rather garrish purple and green. That aside, this is beautifully rendered with a gently haunting poignancy and excellent details. Thank you so very much for sharing.
I know exactly what you mean re the 60's n 70's vibe, but on this specific occasion Missy, the inspiration stems from late in the 70's and most specifically, from a very small room in a small rented property on the Greek island of Hydra .. we (my lady friend & I) lived there for almost 3 months .. the rest is now history .. many thanks for taking a peek into my old boudoir .. Neville
You're very welcome, Sir, my pleasure. Thank you for further details, and correcting me!!
Good write N.
KP turned orange - too much suntan stuff?! lol.
Nothing rhymes with it you know ..
The heartache is wonderfully expressed. Good job.
Thanks for noticing Dan .. much appreciated sir .. Neville
Wonderful loving words Neville ending with such sadness. Great write.
Andy
thanks Andy .. as always very much appreciated .. Neville
appreciate the emotional impact, just the way I like a poem to leave me feeling
We call that a win win around these parts .. Cheers .. Neville
Dark, sad and haunting casting a shadow over the landscape. Whether personal or not I felt it.
I am so glad you sauntered along mate .. as always much appreciated .. Oh' & based entirely on truth .. Neville
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