SPINNING CONCLUSION

Bobby O

SPINNING CONCLUSION 
Phillippe  said how could I let her get away? I did have hope that she was going to stay. I’m feeling that if she loves  or leaves I wont even lift a finger, I don’t think I’ll even think or grieve ,  maybe not even linger when  noticing  she wont be sitting next to me at the ball game.  

Smirking now and not wondering how this before never empty seat shouts intimacy subtracted and belated , Yeah, this ends not complicated,  just simple cause and effect, with quick pause to collect , Sharing out loud  a dialect between me and  my companioned voice of mind hoping  my sanity wakes as  them or they or she intakes These  lyrics.  I hope they’re fair, but admitting something anyway ,I’m a little scared to share and the end will be and spin us somewhere. 

Put a little jazz riff to it , I’m thinking she oughta put a little musica to it , and I’ll abet and let, so she  can visit if she insists. Will there  be a view that’s crowned most fun to see? Probably she wouldn’t tell me. With or without  her sexual screams and silken sheets, that or not  that , this episode will be complete 
BobbyO    

  • Author: Bobby O (Offline Offline)
  • Published: October 15th, 2024 13:13
  • Comment from author about the poem: It is what it is
  • Category: Love
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  • Users favorite of this poem: Cheeky Missy
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  • peet

    Nice lyrics there. Ever thought of turning it into a song ? If not, give it a try.

    • Bobby O

      Thanks. Put dome music to it. We can collaborate. ???

    • sorenbarrett

      We can only hope Bobby. Fun read

      • Bobby O

        Many thanks Sensei!

      • rebellion_in_sanity

        WOW! I wish I could write something like "Smirking now and not wondering how this before never empty seat shouts intimacy subtracted and belated". Loved it.

      • David Wakeling

        Great story with a hopeful ending. Everything goes better with a little Jazz.

        • Bobby O

          Dig

        • arqios

          There’s always that slightest bit of a shift when jazz riffs hit the air!

          • Bobby O

            Dig!

          • Thomas W Case

            Excellent. It has a jazz feel to it.

            • Bobby O

              Dig!

            • Neville



              You win some, you loose some .. or should that be You winsome, you loathsome ..

              • Bobby O

                Dig! You gotta get in the game to win the game

              • NafisaSB

                verse or prose - whatever it is, the effect is delightful

                • Bobby O

                  That’s the same thing my last girlfriend said.
                  Many thanks

                  • NafisaSB

                    always welcome..have a great weekend

                    • Bobby O

                      Thank you. Means a lot

                    • Thad Wilk

                      👏👏 Clapping!
                      Awesomazing poem
                      almost like a song! 🎵 🎶 🎵 🎶
                      Great rhyme and flow
                      made me wanna sing along! 👍
                      Terrific presentation!!
                      Best regards ✌️ Thad

                      • Bobby O

                        You might be familiar with this Melody?
                        “Now listen to the story about a man named Jed, a poor mountaineer, that barely kept his family fed. And then one day he was shooting at some food, and up from the ground came bubbling, crude, oil that is ,Black Gold”

                      • Cheeky Missy

                        Taught poetry is to be read aloud, and your mentioning or alluding to apparently reading this at an open mic event, I just did so: as long as you can relax and read it freely, it'll rock like it does now. Rollicking along like a ramble or a happy jaunt, rhyming to effect like a river bubbling through, it's beautiful and rendered sweetly with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy as should be, not to mention owning a delightfully subtle sense of humor. Thank you very much for sharing!

                        • Bobby O

                          You’re so cute. If you’re ready for a video presentation , there’s a piece I did comparing Hip hop and jazz. And now I’ll stop being pushy. Thank you pretty lady
                          The title is
                          Thelonious Reborn as the Dee Of Double G

                          • Cheeky Missy

                            Is it on YouTube? I'll try to find it.... guess not.

                            • Bobby O

                              It’s on this site. It’s my first poem I posted here

                            • vividvoid14

                              I love the sense of loss
                              With an overpowering acceptance
                              Your an amazing write



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