SPINNING CONCLUSION
Phillippe said how could I let her get away? I did have hope that she was going to stay. I’m feeling that if she loves or leaves I wont even lift a finger, I don’t think I’ll even think or grieve , maybe not even linger when noticing she wont be sitting next to me at the ball game.
Smirking now and not wondering how this before never empty seat shouts intimacy subtracted and belated , Yeah, this ends not complicated, just simple cause and effect, with quick pause to collect , Sharing out loud a dialect between me and my companioned voice of mind hoping my sanity wakes as them or they or she intakes These lyrics. I hope they’re fair, but admitting something anyway ,I’m a little scared to share and the end will be and spin us somewhere.
Put a little jazz riff to it , I’m thinking she oughta put a little musica to it , and I’ll abet and let, so she can visit if she insists. Will there be a view that’s crowned most fun to see? Probably she wouldn’t tell me. With or without her sexual screams and silken sheets, that or not that , this episode will be complete
BobbyO
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Bobby O (
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Nice lyrics there. Ever thought of turning it into a song ? If not, give it a try.
Thanks. Put dome music to it. We can collaborate. ???
We can only hope Bobby. Fun read
Many thanks Sensei!
WOW! I wish I could write something like "Smirking now and not wondering how this before never empty seat shouts intimacy subtracted and belated". Loved it.
Great story with a hopeful ending. Everything goes better with a little Jazz.
Dig
There’s always that slightest bit of a shift when jazz riffs hit the air!
Dig!
Excellent. It has a jazz feel to it.
Dig!
You win some, you loose some .. or should that be You winsome, you loathsome ..
Dig! You gotta get in the game to win the game
verse or prose - whatever it is, the effect is delightful
That’s the same thing my last girlfriend said.
Many thanks
always welcome..have a great weekend
👏👏 Clapping!
Awesomazing poem
almost like a song! 🎵 🎶 🎵 🎶
Great rhyme and flow
made me wanna sing along! 👍
Terrific presentation!!
Best regards ✌️ Thad
You might be familiar with this Melody?
“Now listen to the story about a man named Jed, a poor mountaineer, that barely kept his family fed. And then one day he was shooting at some food, and up from the ground came bubbling, crude, oil that is ,Black Gold”
Taught poetry is to be read aloud, and your mentioning or alluding to apparently reading this at an open mic event, I just did so: as long as you can relax and read it freely, it'll rock like it does now. Rollicking along like a ramble or a happy jaunt, rhyming to effect like a river bubbling through, it's beautiful and rendered sweetly with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy as should be, not to mention owning a delightfully subtle sense of humor. Thank you very much for sharing!
You’re so cute. If you’re ready for a video presentation , there’s a piece I did comparing Hip hop and jazz. And now I’ll stop being pushy. Thank you pretty lady
The title is
Thelonious Reborn as the Dee Of Double G
Is it on YouTube? I'll try to find it.... guess not.
It’s on this site. It’s my first poem I posted here
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