Serrated pages

sorenbarrett

Locked behind dark storage shed doors

the smell of old rat urine

in gnawed paper shavings

swarming with silverfish

memory's graveyard of holes,

past emotions now bleached

in faded yellowing photos

cobwebs,

dust, roaches

and droppings

all that's left

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  • Teddy.15

    Jagged edges of a page, so powerful and brilliant, your imagery brought me into see the paper shavings devoured by the rat. Beautifully done. 🌹 Your title is superb.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you so much my friend for your review and most gracious words of support they are as always most welcome and appreciated

    • Neville



      You sure got the edge over many of em .. You are also the only person other than me that I know, that has referenced silver fish (the kind I suspect you mean) in a poem ..

      • sorenbarrett

        Thanks Neville couldn't help but think of that after cleaning out an old shed the other day and all the old memories like Jonah in the bellies or silverfish.

      • arqios

        Like the story of my vagabond life- familiar odours and textures; what a capture!

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you I appreciate your reading it and your comments. They are always welcome.

        • orchidee

          Ahh, more menu ideas for KP! lol.

          • sorenbarrett

            Thanks Orchi I appreciate it

          • Tony36

            BRAVO

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you so much, Tony. I appreciate the review.

              • Tony36

                You're welcome

              • Thomas W Case

                Vivid and sharp imagery. Great work.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much Thomas for the read and comment it is deeply valued

                • Cassie58

                  Wow, so brilliantly penned. All those nasties. I think I’ll just stay outside Soren. Very vivid imagery.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you so much Cassie for your review and kind words they are most valued

                  • Tristan Robert Lange

                    Silverfish and rat urine! This poem is vivid in its descriptive imagery. This beautifully describes the our memories through the passage of time..."memory's graveyard of holes", my favorite line (though every line is brilliant). This is a cathartic write my friend! Well done! 🌹👏🖤❤️🖤

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thank you so much Tristan yes indeed you have seen the picture intended and it with all the others will fade in time.I appreciate the review and kind comments

                    • Bigguy

                      Oh man, you can really throw down! Very refreshing!

                      • sorenbarrett

                        I thank you so much for the review and kind words of support. They are most appreciated

                      • Goldfinch60

                        It is so surprising what memories come to us when going through old things behind locked doors soren.

                        Andy

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you so much Andy your words of support serve as great incentive.

                        • Neilton

                          Impressed by your writing i admit !
                          You conveyed the emotions so well

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind words of support. They mean a great deal.

                          • 2781

                          • 2781

                            Sounds like my shed.

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thanks it was mine. I appreciate the reading of the poem and your supportive remarks.

                              • 2781

                                Always a pleasure.

                              • NafisaSB

                                wow, beautifully penned. i sometimes see these silver fish tumble out of old newspaper cuttings i had preserved long back, and can definitely identify the picture so well drawn out here.
                                brilliant imagery



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