Prisoner in the present
steps on a treadmill floor
a wall to our front and back
Trapped in a room with no door
The floor may move fast or slow
but only in one direction
outside dreams grow
with little intellection
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Love it! “Intellection” now that’s gonna fly, perhaps not far but it will lift off for sure.
Thanks Cryptic for the read. Daylight savings time robs the pockets of time and the present is no present.
Solomon wrote, we are caught in an evil time.
Indeed and Eclesiastes said there is nothing new under the sun.
Ain't that the truth.
.......................... exemplary poetry will neva loose it's universal appeal .. and that's just me trying to think outside the box .. 😎🐧👍
Thanks Neville yes indeed I think you have something there
Prisoner of memory? Great write, Soren.
That too. Thanks so much for the read and comment. Memory a function of the mind and time and time may be nothing more than a mental construct.
Good write SB.
Thanks so much Orchi
"Intellection"! I first read it here! Great poem my friend! 🌹👏
Thank you so much for the read and for the comment as always it is most appreciated and valued. Have a great day.
You are welcome! You too!
🤩👏
A really captivating and
interesting write! 👍
Those fast or slow floors
can give one a fright! 😳
Thanks for sharing,
to read a delight!! 😃
Best regards ✌️ peace. Thad
Thank you, sad
Thank you, Thad for your kind words of support. They are deeply appreciated. Sorry about the first message that said sad. My microphone on my phone is acting up. Have a wonderful wonderful day.
So true. Well written.
Thank you, John. I appreciate your reading of this poem. Have a wonderful day.
i like your beginning such little words can provoke a lot of thought in me
Thank you so much for reading this piece and for your comment it is very helpful and appreciated
wow- keep learning/coming against new words daily - first time i saw the word being used - and it blends beautifully with the verse.. good write, and giving us something to ponder about
Thank you so much Nafisa. I appreciate your reading of this poem and your generous words of support. Have a great day.
i really appreciate your poetry, and look forward to reading it.
keep it up - more power to your pen - and to flights of imagination
Your remarks are also most appreciated
most welcome. stay happy, healthy and blessed
Not sure; half full or half empty? Well done as usual.
Thank you so much Dan for your comments and for your support it is deeply appreciated
Powerful and brilliant 🌹
Thanks Teddy. Your words are most kind and generous. I appreciate them as always. Have a great day.
May those dreams become reality soren.
Andy
Thank you so much, Andy I appreciate your good wishes and your visit. Have a wonderful day.
A fine write. This reminded me of the scene in the Stephen Fry film about Oscar Wilde, where he was on the prison treadmill.
Thank you, Tom. I appreciate your reading of this poem and your interesting observation. Have a wonderful wonderful day.
like this great poem nice flow great to read
Thank you so much, Jim. Your words made a great deal.
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