Metal cage

sorenbarrett

A small piece of shriveled grace
A flap of hanging skin her face
A  skein of tightly pulled gray hair
Deep wrinkles dug and piled high
Leather traveling bags under each eye 
Shoulders a clothes hanger 
on which hung a thread bear sweater with a hole
Revealing a worn, equally thread bear body
Her hands, more bones than flesh 
painted with blue bulging lines
Rusted voice, thin worn with age
 A noble spirit shuffles within a metal cage

Get a free collection of Classic Poetry ↓

✔ Receive the ebook in seconds ✔ 50 poems from 50 different authors


Comments +

Comments10

  • arqios

    A powerfully evocative image. Reminded me of Nana in her last days, I refused to directly look at her so as not to mar the memory I chose to keep of her. So I approached her as always but relied on my peripheral vision, she was mostly blind by then, cataract cloud in one eye and a failed corneal transplant in the other. Strange how this particular reading brought me there. It may take me elsewhere on another day.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you so much a picture painted from a person I saw yesterday. It too, reminded me of people I have known in the past and what I am rapidly becoming myself.

    • orchidee

      Good write SB.

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you so much Orchi I was not referring to KP

      • Tristan Robert Lange

        Aging is not for the faint of heart, and yet even the faint of heart can’t avoid aging. A conundrum! Wonderfully painted, Soren! 👏🌹

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you so much, Tristan. I appreciate your review and your supportive words.

        • Neville



          This reminds me of Poe .. and Madonna very scary stuff ..😎👍

          • sorenbarrett

            Thank you Neville your words are always most encouraging and supportive

          • Tony36

            Powerful write

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you, Tony. I appreciate your reading this poem and your comment.

              • Tony36

                You're welcome

              • RSM0812

                Sounds like a trip to an airport. Lol. Your vivid imagery is excellent. It paints a perfect picture.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you so much for the read and comment it is appreciated

                • David Wakeling

                  This is powerful. It summarizes the human condition perfectly. Wonderful. reminds me of my honeymoon.Just kidding

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you so much, David. I appreciate your interpretation and support.

                  • Teddy.15

                    Your imagery was like taking a walk into my future somewhat, by the end I had goosebumps, beautiful dear sorrenbarret 🌹

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thank you so much, Teddy. I couldn’t help but write this after seeing a poor old woman walking down the street yesterday.

                    • Thomas W Case

                      Tremendous work. Powerful.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you so much, Thomas. Your words mean a great deal.

                      • Goldfinch60

                        Powerful words soren, may that Spirit rise from the cage and go onto a great life.

                        Andy

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you, Andy. In watching an old woman walk with her walker I cannot help with being inspired to write about this process of age.



                        To be able to comment and rate this poem, you must be registered. Register here or if you are already registered, login here.