A fly's confusion is rehearsed as its direction is reversed
Only one thing on its mind, someone to annoy or to blind
Perseverant buzzing sings, from translucent talking wings
Pleasant conversation interrupts, ripe fruits corrupts
Deceptive rainbows on its head, spreading essence of the dead
Returning to where it did begin, stinging bite under your skin
Flying viper with six legs, in your food lays its eggs
In every friendly group, there's a fly in the social soup
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Good write SB.
Thanks so much Orchi appreciate it
Ah! Now that is a scary metaphor, it’s thousand googly eyes to boot!
Thanks Cryptic as always appreciate the review and comment. Yes flies are annoying
These are the type I enjoy, indie you-never-know-what-to-expect works. They're my favourite so far. And I like the fact that its about a fly.
Thank you Melancholic for the review and support it is most appreciated.
You’re very much welcome
There is certainly always something to spoil the soup, your imagery and metaphor superb 🌹
Thanks dear friend for the read and comment it is as always cherrished
Lord of flies .William Golden .1954.
Remember that book from High School. Thanks Lorenz for the read and comment it is most appreciated
Waiter there’s a fly in my soup.
Don’t worry, it won’t eat much.
Flies are a nuisance but they make for great metaphors. Also many jokes. Even flies have a purpose in life. Well penned Soren.
Thanks so much Cassie. Yes everything has its place and I have no problem with flies as long as they stay away from me.
A really enjoyable read about one of life`s real pains, and i love the last line, great read.
Thanks so much for the review Toban I appeciate it
You are very welcome
A confused fly, repeating its disorderly choreography over and over... the perfect image of this chaotic creature.
Thanks you so much for the read and comment it is most appreciated. Whether fly, bar fly or party fly they are all the same there is always one to annoy
Sorry to be a fly in the ointment (ho ho ho) but I do think they should get an honourable mention for the pollination they do...irritating health hazard they may be...
A rich write, Soren.
Thanks Dave your reviews are always so welcome and appreciated. You're trying to make me feel guilty by not writing as many as you are reviewing. Come on Dave I very much enjoy your poems so give us some more.
Still scratching around, but at a loss right now. Try to keep my hand in by annoying Thad Wilk...😇
I guess the fly
has a meaning in life,
but I haven't figured
out yet what it is¿? 🤔
Awesome write!
Great use of metaphor
and creepy good imagery!!
Thanks for sharing my friend!
Best regards ✌️ Thad
Thanks Thad I guess flies are food for thoughtful frogs. Appreciate the read
Wow…excellent running metaphor that makes me want to sing, “shoo fly…” 😂 Well done, my friend! 🌹👏 Seriously rich, and creepy, imagery!
Thanks Tristan I appreciate your support and kind words
I like it--definitely makes me a little uneasy, but so does the person, so it was a beautiful metaphor!
Thank you. Yes those type make me uneasy as well
I so love the rehearsed confusion line. As usual close your observations have let you produce valid explanations in verse for what we mostly already know. Bravo.
Thanks Dan yea when we get old we become predictable, at least most of the time. Appreciate the read and comment
Flies can be a right pain sometimes soren.
Andy
Yes they can Gold whether human or insect. Thanks so much for the read
Just brilliant. Loved it. The lines flowed so well.
Thank you Tom I appreciate the words of support they are most important
its a good write Soren, buzzzzz
Thank you so much Mase your support is valued.
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