Notice of absence from arqios
an absence of Presence conjures Absence…
an absence of Presence conjures Absence…
flames and mirrors flash
windows and rain, pan on screen
reflective pools, still
lines, l o n g d r a w I n g gaze
light, topographic texture
shade; toxic mixture
ambient perspective
people together, alone
all moving me home
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crypticbard (Pseudonym) (
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Words to give thought.I particularly loved "people together, alone" so often true and in the deepest sense always true. A poem of increasing depth the more it is read
Yay! My first response from your ‘quill!’ I’m so glad you picked up on that and brought it to view. Our aloneness can quite often surpass the peopleness of our days, it appears to be a present day plague. Thanks for your time, company, and kind words Soren. Your friendship over the years means more than words and platitudes. 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻
It comes in many forms feeling on your own, individual isolation, an individual in a crowd, or even a group of people battling on their own, feeling the world has ignored them. Mor about todays mindset, only worry what`s on our doorstep and don`t look down the street enough. Enjoyed the thought provoking read
Thanks most kindly 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻
You are very welcome
Good write A.
Thanks O 🙏🏻
So nice to read, especially the fragmented but kinda connected lines which shows so much disorientation but as well as contemplation. And we all long for a sense of home.
Thanks kindly, you’ve got the feel spot on! Exactly what this poem hopes to express 🙏🏻👍🏻🕊
"People together, alone." Reminds me of the Bon Jovi song, "Living in Sin", "You can talk but still say nothing / You stay together but alone." Indeed. So very true. A powerful write my friend. 🙏❤️
Oh, I have to pull up that song, it’s been so long!!! Radio station programming is not quite like it used to be. I guess the money and audience have somehow shifted elsewhere 🤷🙏🏻👍🏻🕊
Sounds like something is missing. Beautifully done. 🌹
Perhaps that’s the fill in the blanks feeling that haiku brings with it… idk 🤷🙏🏻🕊
Completely missed that, marvelous 🌹
It’s easy to miss, really. I only realised it was after my first draft. ‘Auto-haiku?’ 🤣
Superb work. Deep and etheral.
Many thanks TWC 👍🏻🙏🏻🕊
A thought provoking
and evocative write!!
Feeling alone in a crowd
not a pretty sight! 😞
Thank you for sharing
a pleasure to recite!👏
Best regards ✌️ Thad
Oh yay, glad it sounded right, aloud. 🙏🏻 Thanks for letting me/us know, Thad 👍🏻🕊most appreciated 😊
Really flows thanks to the 575 format - not easy to write but an easy read.
Still sweating! Thanks so much for that affirmation 🙏🏻👍🏻🕊️
May your home be full of wonder, joy and love arqios.
Andy
Good stuff! Thanks Andy 🙏🏻🕊 for what good is it to go home to one that is not so! Your ‘wide’ thinking is much valued and appreciated 😊🌷👍🏻
Amazing and profound, shades of Béla Tarr too.
Thanks so much 🤩🙏🏻🕊️
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