this hilltop climb
steeper than expected
slower walking an aging
canine
breathless
with each step taken
that grassy plateau nearer
dusted in overnight frosting
white winter bites hard
swallows on the tongue
sadness of four years passing
lingers on a pathway paused
to listen to the tinkle
of wind chimes carried
carried on a breeze of swift
sweeping
sweeping across our valley
weeping in remembrance of
a young vibrant life
last breath lost to youths
to a steel blade ambush
hotheads of stupidity
Olly Stevens RIP age 13 🌹
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This poem carries with it the reader. Very well written it pulls the reader up that hill and in its exertion left panting. There is a sense of loss, loyalty to a memory, sadness over stupidity all cast in the perfect image of a snow frosted mount. A sumit climbed to end here. Full of metaphor this poem leaves a haunting feeling and sense of emptiness.
Thank you sorenbarrett for sharing your thoughts. You are very much appreciated. Have a happy Wednesday.
Heartbreaking 💔 knives have always been a problem, just seems to be worse now a days to lose a life at any age is unacceptable but as I myself have an almost 12 year old son, this churns my inside 🌹 a truly magnificent piece, should be shared in schools. 💜
Dear Teddy, children killing children. What a terrible state of affairs. When it happens on your own doorstep so to speak, it makes the whole thing even more shocking. The three perpetrators are paying the price for it, but they will eventually be freed. The parents of Olly have a life sentence. Thank you for your thoughts. 💜🌹
Yes a life sentence for any parent who.loses a child but also in such a cruel way. Cassie, I truly am grateful I don't live in the UK at this moment. I am so sad to say it too. 🌹 Sending loads of love and good vibes to your street and to Ollie's parents and family. ❤️
Heart rending, where peace and tragedy connect; in essence, the dog and the hilltop climb provide a physical and emotional landscape in which the deeper narrative of loss, memory, and reflection unfolds, enriching this poem's overall impact.
Dear arqios, thank you for your thoughts. Children killing children is a difficult topic to comprehend. A local situation, makes it even more shocking. Have a great Wednesday.
Oh my. RIP Olly. Why does stupidity have to carry such a weighty cost? Human violence, displayed at such a young age. I looked up Olly's story and it is such a terrible tragedy that kids/humans would do that to another kid, and for what reason? Senseless stupidity, callous evil. Both...and the result is a beautiful life and soul taken from this world. Wonderful poem, Cassie. Thank you for sharing his memory with us all. His story deserves to be heard.
Thank you for looking Olly up to find out more about his story. A local tragedy, which makes it even more shocking. I appreciate your thoughts Tristen. Thank you so much. Have a happy Wednesday.
Excellent write
Many thanks Tony. You are appreciated.
You're welcome
Wonderful words Cassie.
Andy
Thank you so much for your kind review Andy. Much appreciated.
Beautiful work. I can feel it and see it. Great imagery.
Thank you Thomas for your encouragement. Much appreciated.
hi Cassie your poem is very touching and emotional
the words describe the poem so well and touches the heart
to lose the life of child in a senseless killing is hard to bare
when its children that have done it harder to understand
parents are sentenced to life killers can be set free
knife crime now is getting worse almost epidemic
a lovely poem you have written should be proud of yourself
you really a very talented writer but you know how good you are Jim xx
Dear Jim, you always leave me such warm and encouraging comments which are very much appreciated. I do love poetry very much but I’m not so sure I am as good as you think I am. There’s a whole lot of talented poets about. I just try to keep writing. You are most kind and I thank you.
theres more than just me on here say you are talented we all cant be wrong
there is a lot of talented poets about more the better keep poetry alive
keep writing jim xx
A really captivating,
and poignant 😢 poem!
Great write and
message you've penned!👍
Eloquently woven poetess!!!
Best wishes 🍀 🤗 🌹 🐦 Thad
Thank you so much Thad. Always good to have your thoughts. All the best.
Such a powerful piece, Cassie. The emotion comes through on every line. A fine write. Thanks so much for sharing.
Many thanks for stopping by Tom. All good wishes.
'Wind chime tree'----- wonderful, heart touching where peace and sorrow meets. Loss is the reflection of the poem. This poem leaves us astounded.
I could feel and sense the poem. I appreciate your magnificent work in this poem!
The poignant incident of Olly left me sad and a sense of loss overpowered me at an instant.
I myself lost my dear father at a very tender and young age of six, and can understand the situation of Olly's parents.
These atrocities on young children must be stopped. Olly's story should be shared in schools beside moral education.
Last but not the least, I enjoyed your poems truly. Hope to read more of your poems in the coming days!
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