Old Man Winter (senryu)

Teddy.15

 

I become weaker  

 

with every leaf that falls

 

my winter is here.

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  • sorenbarrett

    Dear Teddy in some latin based languages leaves may be pabes as well and so it seems at times that our muse grows more distant as we write more but infact our work grows stronger with more practice. Maybe not the intended interpretation but then my mind wanders. A very lovely haiku or senryu depending on who the I is.

    • Teddy.15

      Dearest Sorrenbarret old man winter is a way to say winter, so I liked it as a title just to be different, so here I'm speaking of winter but I am also speaking of the season of a person, it could have been he she or I. Thank you dearest friend, you pushed yourself yesterday and I in turn did the same today. 🌹

      • sorenbarrett

        In my unsteady hand the g became a d so it should have read pages. Never the less I got the I and I guess not wanting to see my own winter that has set in I pushed it away under the pages.

        • Teddy.15

          💜

        • arqios

          So many old men, it’s a wonder they haven’t totally faded away, there’s River, on the Moon, Winter, Coyote, Time, and the Sea, Willow, Yells at Cloud and old man Mountain…. And we’re all of us joining the queue… 🙏🏻👍🏻🕊

          • Teddy.15

            Thank you dear arqios 🌹

          • LP2187

            Beautiful 👏 enjoyed the read!

          • Cassie58

            Reminds me how fragility can set in with advancing age. Old man winter is a fine metaphor. I visited a residential home yesterday and there were several elderly men with dementia that this fine senryu would apply to. They are certainly in the winter of their lives, getting lonelier, weaker and colder by the day. So very well composed dear Teddy 🌹💜

            • Teddy.15

              I guess my winter represents a human as a tree, yes I have a friend who has dementia she is well looked after by her husband but each time I see her it just makes me so sad to see how frail she is inside and out. Thank you dearest Cassie for your ever beautiful compassion and empathy. 🌹

            • Goldfinch60

              But strength will return
              As Spring will bring us new growth
              In to our New Year

              Andy

              • Teddy.15

                So very kind of you dearest Andy 🌹



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