Part of A Whole That Needs Mending
There is part of a whole
that needs
to be mended and crying
out for attention ..
Yet while I still struggle
to forgive you
for dying like that ..
I doubt, no matter how
hard I might try ..
I won’t find a patch that’s
anywhere, near big enough ..
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Author:
Neville (
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- Comment from author about the poem: just for the record .. this is a mourning song that I wrote, one recent evening 💜
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You sense a touch of anger that they have gone and left you, but get the overwhelming of the sense off loss of a loved one. Very touching and emotional write, Thank you Neville
No my friend, thank you .. Neville
Ah well i interpreted that one wrong then, still enjoyed the read
Certainly you play with my mind. On the whole if I were to mend a whole hole. I wouldn't be too concerned with the dying but rather the dyeing of the patch. As for it being a mourning song written in the evening I would rather mourn in the morn. Ah Neville you know I have a weakness for such silly homophones and homographs simply loved this bit of humor.
Thanks muchly my friend .. Neville
A poignant write N.
Thank you Orchidee .. Neville
As someone who has dealt with death and mourning often, and not just my own, this poem is spot on, my friend. A wonderful expression. We can indeed find ourselves angry and having a hard time forgiving someone for dying. A very natural and common feeling. Brilliant grief poem, my friend! 🌹👏
So many believe that the grieving process should follow a set pattern .. but as I am sure you already know, that is not always the case .. there are those of us that go round in circles from let's say shock to denial and searching back to denial etc etc & many times before resolution occurs, if it ever truly does .. thanks for your understanding, insight and opinion .. Neville
You are welcome, Neville. Yes, I certainly know that, and I know the difficulty of getting people to understand that. Not an easy task. Also, as you alluded to, there is no time limit to grief.
That would be nice to see/read/experience- five or so poems covering each “stage” or face of grief. 👍🏻🙏🏻🕊
Despite my exposure to other peoples losses through work, I am a poor griever .. so will give that a miss .. but thanks brother a .. N
Excellent write Nevilie
Cheers mate .. Neville
You're welcome
It's not about good-bye, but more of smiling knowing you're in the presence of your loved ones. Excellent write N. 😉👍
Cheers AP .. hope you are well and will hang around a while .. you have been missed .. Neville
I'm still kickin'. 😉👍Hope you're well and enjoying life. Missed you too. I'm just not writing as often these days. 🙄
There's rather a sacred beauty to this exquisite, pretty number, especially with such a subtly passionate note as THAT author's notice. How do you cover a gaping hole which is rather truly an empty shell left behind? Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and such a painfully haunting poignancy, I almost hesitate to say anything. Thank you very much for sharing.
Thanks a million for stopping by Missy .. Neville
Emotive words Neville, in time all the good things will be remembered and the good things will fix that patch.
Andy
Maybe ............... I sure hope so ...
A moving write, Neville. You really captured the emotion.
Thank you Tom .. 😎👍
Wow, short but so intense. I know loss is lessened by putting it into verse. Nice job.
Thank you kindly sir .. Neville
so touching and moving - hope you find closure soon take care -be safe and happy
Thank you for the visit and for caring .. Neville
most welcome
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