Some Things She Once Said
She once said that she lived
somewhere
near Gdansk, in a rented
apartment with
her beautiful young daughter ..
Surrounded
by surplus tall chimneys,
sparce bearded
scholars, artists and geeks ..
You know,
those who I guess may think
laterally,
kind of sideways and deeply ..
Proper textbook
bohemia, or so I imagined ..
And just maybe,
the kind of place I might once
have felt quite
happy to live in, so to speak ..
She went on to
suggest she had been hurt once
too often
and was now, taking a break
from reality
and tho' her ego may be dying,
she insisted she
still feels pain and can be hurt just
the same, so be
very gentle with me, she begged ..
Oh’ dear lord,
at that time, I then thought if we
ever did meet,
it would need to occur in a park,
or a public place
and at least, somewhere safe like
good old Ukraine ..
But even then, I doubt I could’ve
kept my hands off her ..
Instead, it was then, I fell for the
smile, her dark hair,
brown eyes and yes, much to
my surprise, her
vulnerability and her honesty ..
Sometime later,
after we fucked a few times and
made love often
she found me on Facebook but
insisted I block her
for the sake of confidentiality
and the daughter,
she loved, more than anything
this messed up
world of ours, cared to offer her ..
Yes, it was then we
shook hands and promised each
other to always be no
more than lovers and ever friends ..
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Author:
Neville (
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Neville forgive me but this took me as personification of Id meets Ego. Never the less the casual wording and first person dialogue makes for so intimate of a read. I sill love your pacing and the use of it to hold the reader back until just the right moment. This metaphor leaves a powerful message that distance in a relationship is necessary for its health. A deep and lovely write or maybe I am one of those lateral thinkers.
That's super and there's nowt to forgive .. honest .. Neville
Life’s complications! Somehow we manage to live and move on. 🙏🏻🕊️
Yep .. aint that the truth ..
I get a sense of distance is healthy also consideration of the child taken into account, but more than anything i get the sense of one wanting it to be more than the other was willing to give, probably wrong, but a very enjoyable and interesting read
there are no wrongs in my book PL only writes .. and thanks so much for calling .. Neville
You are very welcome
Excellent write Nevilie
That’ll do Tony, cheers .. Neville
You're welcome
I wish KP would say - I'm emigrating to Australia! lol.
Who would change the.straw in your hutch and fill your water bottle if she did take off eh’ ..
I think you should count your blessings 🐀😖🐭
Sometimes distance is necessary and healthy. Wonderfully written, my friend. 👏
That is so very kind of you Tristan and greatly appreciated my friend .. Neville 👍
A love lost through the circumstances of separation. The distance serving as a guardian against entanglement. Still, it lingers in the heart and rises up in the words of the poet. Loved it. - Phil A.
That’s all that matters to both me and my pen .. thanks a million my friend .. Hope you are well and that 2025 is being kind to you .. Neville
I felt two people here brought together in unusual circumstances, both needing a tender loving touch. Some things aren’t meant to be, but they can leave beautiful memories in their wake. Lovely.
Thank you both kindly and true Cassie .. Your insight, empathy and kindness collectively become you .. Neville
Life can be like this on occasions Neville but eventually it all works out fine.
Andy
the ending was perfect, just as we both wanted but thanks for the concern & associated empathy .. Neville
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