Pity's sword of steel, making God of one that does it wield
Deadlier than revenge's poisoned arrow fate or ax of hate
Sympathy's cutting edge annealed, opening a little man's shield
Condescending, sheering weight, lays all victims at justice's gate
Forged of compassion's ore, mined on empathy's shore
Patience tempered heat, quenched complete in cold minutes timed
On sincerity's stone does grind, honed sharp, realigned, no one can ignore
This a weapon of the mind refined
Treating the enemy as one below, disarming the hardest blow
Now shrunken the largest foe, disemboweled their ego
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How so very true! And no less in a poem too🙏🏻🕊
Thanks so much Cryptic appreciate the read and comment. Indeed I know I think many of mine have received that sentence in the past.
Then it’s about time that I mixed it up a bit👍🏻🕊️
Loved this read of honest observations, with some great lines in.
Thank you so much for the read and most kind words they are appreciated
You are very welcome
I'm a grand believer that some thrive on pity, I myself am not a fan of those sorts, I am a grand believer of justice ⚖️ and ego well, you know me well enough to know that's a thing I really dislike, I want to show you a line I love more but in this case it's every line, so powerful and indeed is the very reason I myself do not believe in God. Kudos, you just interpreted my own thoughts of today. 🤗 🌹
Thank you so much Teddy yes you are right this sword is owned by a narcissist and makes deep cuts without regard to friend or foe. Thanks so much for the read and interpretation it is always most appreciated
At times when one has a clear advantage, pity per se is indeed the most welcome and ultimate gift .. however, those that use it as a weapon will ultimately lose that advantage on what will become an uneven playing field .. this feels like something that is being played out write now .. and I note not a drop of ink wasted .. Neville
Indeed tis true Neville pity is a two edged sword it cuts both ways. One for the sender and the other for the receiver. You see right through this guise and so the armor is well fit. You are too smart for such simple tools I'll have to dig deeper. Thanks so much for the read and understanding comment as always appreciated.
Such a beautiful and thought provoking poem! Well done!
Thank you so much Salvia for the most generous and kind review it is appreciated as always
This is a powerful poem, Soren. Your poem advocates for a change in perspective regarding how we approach conflict. It suggests that fostering understanding and compassion can lead to more effective and just resolutions than reliance on violence and revenge. I like how you use the metaphor of weapons to represent emotional and psychological tools. For example, You use "Pity's sword of steel" which symbolizes the strength of compassion. You create a striking contrast between violence and kindness.
Thanks so much for the review and most understanding and kind words. These are most appreciated and valued.
At first read, this comes off as a poem about empathy and compassion; however, some clues might alter that initial reading. Words such as pity and weapon. The lines: “no one can ignore / This a weapon of the mind refined / Treating the enemy as one below, disarming the hardest blow / Now shrunken the largest foe, disemboweled their ego”, are further evidence that this is someone who is using pity, compassion and empathy against others as weapon, perhaps utilizing it as a way of building themselves up why cutting others down. So, while this initially sounds like a sincerely compassionate person, he/she turns out to be a narcissist, weaponizing those otherwise good things against others for their own gain. Well done on this, my friend. A multi-layered and rewarding read. ❤️🙏 I apologize for my absence for the last couple of days. Been hit hard with a nasty cold. Finally, I feel somewhat alive again! LOL!
Glad you are feeling better and so glad you caught the different levels at which pity might be used. Thank you so much for the read and thought involved in its interpretation. I suppose that the benevolent use of empathy and sympathy ultimately results in sublime justice in disarming those that are incapable of it.
Yes, I would suppose so, too. You are most welcome, my friend. It is good to be back!
I love the metaphor. Excellent work.
Thanks so much Thomas means a lot
This is quite a lot to unpack.I had to read it twice to appreciate it.Pity sympathy compassion they are all there .Amazing poem
Thanks David sorry for the triple read. This one became a bit complex. Appreciate the comment as always and hopefully the next will be a bit easier.
Great flow, rhyming and rhythm to this one. Metaphorically relatable. Well done!
Thanks so much for the read and the kind words they are most appreciated
Wonderful words of understanding soren.
Andy
Thank you Andy your read is most appreciated
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