Notice of absence from arqios
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as feathers in flight; none of them stay
in the lapping of waves, multitudinous
grip slipping off, pulling further away
disappearing into the moon's pull
sky and horizon consummate
your vanishing, pointlessly
seeping, sweeping away
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Author:
crypticbard (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Hope this isn’t too dark or too heavy… or permanent🙏🏻🕊️
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- Users favorite of this poem: Cassie58, Cheeky Missy
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Good write A. Go away Alf, you say!
Rain, rain go away, come again another day… little Tommy wants to play!
the tides return twice a day, and birds migrate and return too, but the river is something else. Once that water has gone beneath the bridge, it never returns. My mind drifted reading you, excuse my ramblings. I didn’t see permanent in your poem, but then I seek light rather than darkness. Thought provoking. Have a good day arqios.
No need to be excused, the mouth of the river has always been an interesting biome! Thanks Cassie 🙏🏻🕊️
Seems a sense of loneliness and losing confidence. A very powerful piece.Excellent
Kind of and almost, like conceding without committing to that sense of loneliness and loss… at the cusp of it 🙏🏻🕊️
From one that frequently writes dark, no this is not too dark. It talks to entropy the second law of thermodynamics. It is a constant in nature from birth to death and from empathy to disinterest. I found this poem very nicely woven and hope that I didn't unravel it.
Nothing unraveled, friend. You do know me so well…. The tendency to darkness can garnish as well as contour and texture the other side of the spectrum- that is what I hope, pragmatic cynicism, or something like that 🙏🏻🕊
Much thought about how our surroundings may set us on a mood or a journey.
I get a small sense of confidence and belief so slipping away but not knowing why, enjoyed the read
Oh nice… it’s the nuances that makes expression so interesting and varied 🙏🏻🕊
You are very welcome
an insidious demise springs to mind .. I doubt you could have crafted it better .. indeed I'm pretty sure that nobody could .. so very sadly but very muchly enjoyed .. Neville
Love the contradictions of life, somewhat like the feel of an Alfred Hitchcock film. 🙏🏻🕊️thanks Neville🕊️🙏🏻
Superb.
Thanks Thomas 🙏🏻🕊
They will always return arqios as love will bring them back.
Andy
That it will! Thanks Andy 🙏🏻🕊
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