Listen Loud Just One More Time
He so wanted to tell her all over again,
just how much he loved her ..
Not only that, but he wanted to chant it
out loud, so the whole world
could hear him and in universal tongues ..
Indeed, all those words he once
dare only release, in near silent whispers
and left in the perfect shells
of both her pretty ears he so needed to shout
out just once more, but this time to
argue and to resonate like unanimous war drums ..
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Neville (
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The subtlety in this piece nearly slipped past me. If he needs to shout and argue then he is not being heard and is that a cue war drums? Is the war with a competitor, her or himself? Often a whisper is heard more easily than a shout and peace talks might be in order. Another lovely subtle piece with so much packed within it. Like all good art it changes with ones mood.
I am honoured you should smile so favourably upon these words of mine .. many thanks sorenbarrett .. Neville
Sometimes being subtle needs a bit of loud listening 🙏🏻🕊
You said it .. bless you my friend .. Neville
Sometimes whispers are louded than shouts and vica versa, but that depend of who the war drums for, yourself or someone else, very interesting, relatable and enjoyable read
Thank you kindly my friend .. Neville
You are very welcome
"listen loud", sometimes when you are conveying love, its so loud yet so quiet you can hear a pin drop. I think this is a wonderful piece, enjoyed reading!
Hello Christina8 .. bless you he sighed as he heard the pin drop from this side of the Pond .. Neville
Lemme guess, those shells were as calcified as the reference to conch suggested, right?! But he HAD to tell her because nothing was too good for whom he adored. Ah, but I'm well-nigh overcome until I can hardly breathe. Oh you and your skill! Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a captivating poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
Thank you so much for stopping by Missy .. Kindly regards from this side of the pond to yours ma'am .. Neville
Layers this poem has…and the more one peels away, the more one gets the sense that what was once a source of hope and love has be one a source of strain. Relationships…in them, aren’t we all. Wonderful poem my friend!
Thanks a million mate so very much appreciated .. Neville 😎👍
You are most welcome, Neville!
So very beautifully rendered Neville, all the way down until those final two lines summoned the war drums. Purchased book number twelve recently, pleased to support your chosen charities. I have the full set now.
Dear Cassie, very, very occasionally, words just seem to fail me .. & believe me my friend, this is one of those very rare occasions. Thank you from the bottom of my heart 💜
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A fine write N. I didn't even want to whisper to KP. I generally ignore her. lol.
You are all ❤️ aren’t you
Sometimes they just do not hear Neville but in true love they know.
Andy
Thanks for the nod Andy .. Neville
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