A swallow too fast is in the past
A shadow cast that doesn't last
Time so vast soon surpassed
Pleasure amassed by haste harassed
Money a ton soon is none
A race begun is soon run
Time spun is soon undone
Ends the fun a bullet in the gun
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Now that has compressed so much in so few lines, bursting with thought and meaning🙏🏻🕊️
Thanks Cryptic appreciate the read. Used to compress files on the computer to save space now just words.
Forgive me as this is more than likely not what you intended it to mean, but to me it comes across as someone who is only interested in themselves and getting to the top as quickly as possible, regardless of cost to himself or others, than when he makes it, it's not what he thought it would be and the pleasure is short lived, hence the bullet, whatever it means I have enjoyed reading this write
Tobani never be hesitant to venture an interpretation because regardless of what I intended what is important is how each reader takes it. Your interpretation is most interesting and as valid as any other. The last part of it in fact had passed through my mind as I wrote it. Your review is always most valued and cherrished
Thank you and you are very welcome
This shoots like a machine gun.Wonderful construction and wisdom.Well done
Thank you David I always appreciate your reads and comments. Time passes quickly
Poignant reminder to cherish the present, as life's moments and pursuits can be fleeting. Well written!!!!
Thank you so much Salvia I always appreciate your kind words of encouragement
The end.
Indeed and so it is with all things rushed.
This one is fired from the hip, tragic as it is honest. A hurried existence, to make a quick buck, as it were. Each line a shot of truth in a life lived until the final bullet.
This is one for the books - excellent!
Kind regards,
Tony.
Tremendous work.
Thank you so much Thomas your support is most important to me.
As with time, firefly flash. Nice ✍️
John
Thank you John for the read and comment it is most appreciated
Weird...It reminds of sentences from 70's spaghetti western !
Well I used to watch them so maybe they were stuck in there somewhere. Weird is always better than boring Lorenz Thanks so much for the read
BRAVO
Thank you Tony
You're welcome
In this I see the course of one's life with, perhaps, death being the bullet in the gun ending fun. The rushing to grow up, the youthful mistakes cast a bit of a shadow but are forgotten by the progression of one's life and the busyness therein. Then, before one knows it...death. Or, it could be past mistakes forgotten only to return with a vengeance, I can see multiple interpretations in this wonderful poem. Well done, my friend. 🌹👏
Thank you so much Tristan for that viewpoint. Yes there are different possible interpretations. Your comments are always valued.
Reminds me of Russian Roulette at the end there. I see a gambler, trying so desperately to buy pleasure, then trying desperately to win back his losses. Of course, it's only so long until either a mistake is made, or a purposeful shot taken.
Thank you Ninja that is a great view and interpretation. Well done.
Of course! It's a great poem!
But the bullet was a blank soren and all was good.
Andy
Thanks so much Andy always appreciate your positive and most kind words
I love the use of repetitive rhyming here in the different stanzas! Very simple but is nicely tied together 🙂
Thank you so much maydanae for the review and kind words of support they are always welcome
a very nicely expressed and deep writing,well done
Are moments really moments if we quickly convert them to memories? I read this poem really sloowly
Thank you Abraham for you read of this poem that was a moment now past but so right the memory is not. Your review is most appreciated
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