Tick Tock.
Time Slipping.
No Forgiving.
Regrets Amassed.
Dreams Elapsed.
Anger Spilled.
Hate refilled.
Friends Absent.
Absent Parents.
Tick Tock.
Stop the clock.
Night and Day.
Memories Made.
Resentment Saved
Drunken Haze.
Hurt and Pain.
Mind Reframed.
Desired End.
Devil's Friend.
Tick Tock.
Stop The Clock.
Wounds Bleed.
Heart Concedes.
Soul Blackened.
Devil Awakened.
Failure Assured.
Bitterness Pours.
Love Abandoned.
Eyes Saddened.
Tick Tock.
Stop The Clock.
Hope Broken.
Words Spoken.
Thoughts Arrive.
Saviour Denied.
Shining Bright.
Sharp Knife.
Flashing Blade.
Sanity Saved.
Pain
Released.
Freedom
Reached.
Tick
Tock
Clock
Stopped.
Tobani April 2025.
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Good write T.
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Time is like a steed in some ways on our life journey 🙏🏻🕊️
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Well done,Your story revolves around personal struggles with time, regret, and inner turmoil. It touches upon themes of anger, addiction, loss, and the quest for liberation from emotional pain. a very emotional journey, highlighting feelings of regret, anger, and the desire for escape from suffering. Your poem explores the relentless passage of time and its impact on human emotions, relationships, and mental health. It reflects on the themes of regret, pain, and the desire for escape, ultimately culminating in a quest for freedom from suffering. I know this pain so well.
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The power of this write comes in its format and meter. The use of two words in each line echoes the ticking of the clock which is further noted in the last lines of the stanzas. There is a feeling of time winding down. With its passage there are many dark things remembered until the last stanza where it is released and freedom attained as the clock stops, time is up. Very nicely done Tobani
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This is very clever.It captures the concept of time both in text and structure. Very enjoyable read
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Great write, dear poet and friend. This one resonated deeply. Tick tock indeed. A reality for some of us, and an urgent message with a very memorable form and flow. Brilliant. 👏🌹
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You are most welcome, my friend. Hope you are having a lovely evening!
You too
Omg this poem hit me deep, according to me it resembles a faint sense of living now as you feel tired from everything and its all boring and you just want to be out of this world, sometimes resorting to pain feels nice like you're free again... it hurts but feels like you'e in control, still sinking in a place you dont desire to live, its honestly depressing and I love how you captured this beauty in words described so beautifully dude omg I relate to this poem frr, also if u ever wanna talk I'm gunna be heor existing ik im like 16 and like really young but if u ever wanna be heard... I'm here, these words are not fake okie
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Superb.
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I love a thin poem. Anger, hate, love and sanity beautifully expressed in this sometimes hard hitting poem. Perfectly composed with an array of poetic devices. A complete joy to read.
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Tony.
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Yikes. I don't like the damning finality of this. Please say you're alright. [Oops, now I am sounding exactly like my best friend hours ago as I drove home from work very aggrievedly.] How beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a lively, yet frightening poignancy. What I love is the progression, that is, until it seems to conclude with death. Thank you for sharing.
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Heartfelt write Tobani, but toi stop the clock that way is not the way to go.
Andy
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I love the story told in this simple poem. So many written similar have a bland feel but this really hits home. Thanks for sharing
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