I'm off today, I can feel the sway, awakened from a hole
Out of the warm into a storm awaiting execution of the soul
Feeling a breeze that no one sees, dark skies
Move a foot, brush off the soot, wipe sleep from worried eyes
Take a breath, smell night's death, take in fragrance of new day
Cast off dream's disease, arise from your knees, condemned get a stay
Look to the sun, a new day's begun from your shadow walk away
Pull cloud covers of vision from your head, raise from the dead, leave yesterday
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The melodious lines brought me there 🙏🏻🕊️
Thanks Cryptic I appreciate the read and I hope that it brought you to the bright side not the dark.
Even in darkness there is a spark 🙏🏻🕊️
Waking up sucks sometimes especially when in a good dream. You penned a morning wake up so vividly real! I truly enjoyed this read.. Good job poet.
Thank you teardrop for your read and kind words of encouragement
nice words...
Thank you so much Dimpy for the read and kind words they are appreciated
Having the rhyme in the middle gives the work an amazing musical cadence. This would be easy to turn into a song. Sadly the topic is alittle dar'I see someone recovering from depression or tiredness.Anyway an amazing poem.
Thanks David I always appreciate your reads and comments. I suppose that could be true with the sun always raising recovery is assured.
A new man, as it were and into a new dawn. This is music to the ears and worth getting up early for. You have a beautiful way with words, so natural and down to earth, and yet composed with a vein of poetry throughout; a most admirable quality. A delight to read.
Kind regards,
Tony.
You humble me with such praise my friend. Thank you very much for your reads and most kind words of support and encouragement they are always most appreciated.
The physical and mental state are incredibly important in this poem, so too in life. Getting out of bed with good thoughts sounds the easiest thing to do in the world yet for many it has it's challenges 🌹 superb imagery and emotions. 💜
Thank you Teddy your words are always most appreciated. Thank you for the review and kindness
Crisp... wise...
Thank you Libellule for the words of support they are most appreciated.
Good write SB.
Thanks so much Orchi for the read and word of encouragement
Beautiful work. Powerful.
Thank you Thomas for your continued support
This one brings you there in terms of the imagery, and it is a wonderful metaphor for life, really? How many of us have opportunities to move forward yet are somehow hindered by the fog of yesterday as well as "what might be". Stepping out of the fog then, for me, is living in the moment...stepping away from clinging to our past and not over-stressing the future. Powerful write, my friend. Love this for sure. A fave. 🌹👏
Well I am so glad the you got the metaphor in its entirety and appreciate the read and comment most heartily.
You are most welcome, It was excellent, Soren! 👏🌹
Always move forwards in life soren.
Andy
Thanks so much Andy I always appreciate your kindness.
You got that special food ready for KP yet?! LOL.
Comin right up. Thanks Orchi
Leave yesterday, so so powerful. Respect
Thanks so much Sunshine. I appreciate the read and comment.
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