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In times of need, Can we all agree, The wars need to cease We all unite in peace
In times of need, Can we all agree, The wars need to cease We all unite in peace
Look In the Eye.
He stood there calmly and looked him directly in the eye.
Worn skin, gaunt expression and a sad and cynical smile.
The constant stare after a while became very intimidating.
The cynical smile was constant it became quite frightening.
Out came the sharpened knife glistening in the moonlight.
Deep breaths, a forward lunge then he stabbed him twice.
As the man cowered, pleaded then screamed out in pain.
The bloodied sharpened knife was plunged in once again.
The man bleeding profusely slowly crumbled to the ground.
Then on top of him the shattered mirror came crashing down.
Tobani April 2025.
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Tobani / Nataiella (Pseudonym) (
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Your poem effectively conveys a dark and intense atmosphere, drawing the reader into the scene. The imagery is vivid and evocative. Well done!!!
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I've seen that look before and I am glad that I was able to avert inevitable disaster. Profound read 🙏🏻🕊️
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I always love the unexpected, this added the metaphor to give it double strength and power. To spice it up some rhyme and near rhyme, a dramatic setting and what more could you want? I love how well woven the metaphor is. That of self destruction that has no mercy. A definite fave
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I thought I recognized that man. That familiar old cynical smile. That judgmental stare. Nicely done, PL. I really “reflected” on this one.
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A case of mistaken identity.Very clever with a twist.Enjoyed reading
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Powerful poem, my friend. Brutal and powerful...and quite the metaphor. Well done! 🌹👏
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Excellent poem! You convey a dark feeling
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Where in the world do you get these?! My la! How perfectly horrifying, macabre, ghastly, nightmarish! There's no hope of deliverance since the mirror is guilty, no human. Goodnight! What a chilling piece for Monday. Superbly rendered with excellent imagery and a terrifying poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
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Very evocative write Tobani.
Andy
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omg.. you have portrayed this so well, i can visualize the man committing the ultimate act brought about by 'cynical despair'
wonderfully worded
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you are most welcome. have a good day, and a better weekend
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