The Maid

sorenbarrett

When I was a babe I wanted a milk maid
As a child I played and dreamed of a mermaid
In youth I prayed wishing for a young maid
Without the maid love was hand made
Grown and married work to evade, I paid for a maid
Now old, back swayed, I just want my bed made

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  • Demar Desu - 德马尔·德苏

    Hahaha, we are up at the same time Soren!

  • Demar Desu - 德马尔·德苏

    great poem of desires and wisdom with age!

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Demar for the read and the kind words of encouragement they are appreciated

    • Mottakeenur Rehman

      Life’s journey told in maids and dreams so true—
      from milk to love to rest, each phase shines through.

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you Mottakeenur for your review and kind words of support the mean a great deal to me.

      • David Wakeling

        This was clever and fun.Made me smile.Wonderful word play on maid and made.Excellent

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you David for the read and kind words of support they are always appreciated and welcome

        • Reynaldo Casison


          Nice one Soren

          Nice and Witty

          • sorenbarrett

            Thanks Reynaldo for the read and comment it is always most appreciated

          • NafisaSB

            Enjoyed the play on the word made/maid. Nice poem that encompasses the full span of life- fantastic

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you Nafisa I appreciate your read and kind words of encouragement

              • NafisaSB

                always welcome
                have a beautiful and productive weekend

              • Poetic Licence

                Brilliant

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks Tobani for the read and most generous word of encouragement it is appreciated

                  • Poetic Licence

                    You are very welcome

                  • Doggerel Dave

                    Paid - made my day, Soren. Recognition with laughter kept me awake through what should have been my afternoon nap....👍

                    Faved

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks Dave Glad you liked it I always appreciate your reads and comments

                    • Jerry Reynolds

                      Well done, SB. In NY, it is 6, and I make my bed when I get up. At least one thing was done successfully today.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thanks so much Jerry a bed maid is a task staid I always sayed. Have a great day.

                      • Soman Ragavan

                        The ageing process is a most striking thing. When you compare someone's pictures in old age and in young age, you would never believe the transformation, the wreckage that age creates. The wrinkles come from nowhere, the skin sags.... It has been said that after 50 everything heads south. All things start sagging about us. Perhaps there is a cold logic for the ageing process. Generations have to succeed each other, to make room for new ones. This ensures the survival of the race.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Indeed it does Soman and it is true as the hair grows white or falls out and the belly sags there is a message there that now all is pointing to the ground as if to say I belong there. Thank you for your most kind and understanding review it is always most welcome

                        • Tristan Robert Lange

                          Love the Monoryhme scheme and word play. So true. Great poem, my friend. 🌹👏

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you Trostan for your read and for the kind comment it is always most appreciated.

                            • Tristan Robert Lange

                              You are most welcome, my friend. This was a fave for sure! Just read it again!

                            • Tony36

                              Great write

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thank you Tony for the read and comment it is appreciated

                                • Tony36

                                  You're welcome

                                • Tony Grannell

                                  Hello soren,
                                  Hand made love, a very subtle way of putting it, and as for 'back swaying' along in old age, aptly observed and rendered forth with doddering panache - excellent! Even the thought of making a bed is a labour in itself. A delightful verse of humour to carry me through the day. Thank you very much for sharing this one.

                                  From one self 'maid' man to another,

                                  Tony.

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thank you Tony your read and comments mean a great deal and are most appreciated

                                  • orchidee

                                    Good write SB.

                                  • Lorenz

                                    Gently mad ! a fav !

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      Thanks Lorenz I appreciate it

                                    • Goldfinch60

                                      Fine words of passed experiences soren.

                                      Andy

                                      • sorenbarrett

                                        Thank you Andy for the read and and words of encouragement. As always they are valued



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