Visit with a dream

sorenbarrett

Come on in outa da wind, sit on down ave some gin. 
Been warm taday, dry too.
Ain't seen rain in a while but sure good ta see ya an yer smile, 
A'll ave Ma put some more water in da stew. 
Wull ba a bit watery but ya don't mind do you? 
Got dat lower forty ta plough, battery's  dead but a'll figure it out some how. 
Dirt dry as a bone hard as stone ain't seen no rain since last year. 
Think what ah planted l'be commin up soon. 
Ya say it's November, don't matter
A'll put the next crop in after da full moon.
Ain't got no mo water ya say, Ma jus brought ya some yesterday. 
Guess what we got fer da stew will ave ta do, dat all right wid you?

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  • David Wakeling

    Ah this was fun. Really fun accent sounds like Farm hands in America. great poem mi amigo

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you my friend for the read yes you pegged it, worked a few summers on a dairy farm when I was a kid. Appreciate the review.

    • Poetic Licence

      A touch of poetic fun in the voice of an American farm hand, enjoyed the read

      • sorenbarrett

        Thanks Tobani I appreciate the read and comment. Just a rambling rancher.

        • Poetic Licence

          Very enjoyable

        • Jerry Reynolds

          Good write, Sorenbarrett.

          • sorenbarrett

            Thanks Jerry I appreciate your review and kind words

          • Doggerel Dave

            'Rich' is a key word I'd use here: rich in dialogue born of rich experience gained from a rich and varied life. Sounded richly authentic to me, Soren.

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you Dave for your review and thank you more for your kind words of understanding. Yes knew these people at one time or another if not in person in dreams and neighbors. Appreciated Dave

            • Tristan Robert Lange

              A really fun read my friend. Having grown up in rural, farmland in the Skylands region of NJ (if one outside of NJ can believe that exists...it does). Love mountains, love nature, love farms (not factory farms...but farms). So, this hit home for me, my friend! 🌹👏

              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks Tristan thoughts drift through the past and I've been drifting. Thanks so much for the read and support it is most appreciated

                • Tristan Robert Lange

                  You’re welcome!

                • Jeremy Leach

                  Comes across as very authentic. Skilfully put together and I enjoyed reading it.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks so much for your read and kind words of support and encouragement. It is most appreciated

                  • Thomas W Case

                    Tremendous.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks Thomas I appreciate the read

                    • Mottakeenur Rehman

                      A moving glimpse into rural hardship and quiet resilience—loved the raw, authentic voice and tender hope within.
                      Felt like sitting beside the speaker, sharing warmth in a dry, dusty world.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you Mottakeenur for your review and most kind supportive encouragement. Sometimes there are just echoes from a distant past to put down.

                      • Goldfinch60

                        Yes that is fine with me soren, thank you.

                        Andy

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thanks so much Andy for the read and kind support it is always deeply valued

                        • Teddy.15

                          Oh I do love the craft on the accent, and yes that's fine by me. 🌹 Wonderful.

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks Teddy for the read and kind words they are always most welcome and appreciated

                          • NafisaSB

                            Great work. Can see the farmer asking the question 👍💐

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you so much Nafisa your reads and comments are very important to me and much appreciated

                            • ElizabethMoroz

                              Again such great rhyme in here. I love the turns of phrase you use. Is it indicative of a certain culture or ethnicity pardon my ignorance or is it just colloquial creative expressions that you are using? The abbreviated words really fit the rhyme scheme well and the overall descriptive imagery and warmth in the tonal ideas of the poem had me pondering about friendship and stew & human relationships and the warmth of good hospitality. Thankyou thoroughly enjoyed this composition. Sincerely, Elizabeth

                              • sorenbarrett

                                The wording is a blend of what came generations ago from the hills of Tennessee adapted in the west and what I grew up with in another generation. Thank you so much for the review and most kind words of support and encouragement it is appreciated Sorry for the delay in responding this one went overlooked for some reason

                                • ElizabethMoroz

                                  Thanks for your explanation that’s intriguu in ing linguistically and the generational difference is fascinating. What a rich lexicon you have. Your most welcome I find a lot of delight in reading your work so my encouragement comes from a place of gratitude for your insight and skill in writing it. Enjoy your day Soren. Sincerely, Elizabeth



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