Light of progress

sorenbarrett

In the dark we held each other, in shadow all men were brothers
Blood painted our name, no shame we had many mothers
First word spoken silence broken weapon of the lung
A word spear produces fear as rock words are flung

 

Hunter to farmer hides our armor, children our wealth
The birth of chattel, guarded cattle source of health
In the light of the fire desire grew handles
In a low glow fences grew around our candles

 

With Paper tongues possession forged slavery's chains of oppression
In bondage to machines, sheen that freed us, bitten by teeth of gears of depression
Worshiping circuit voices of choices illusion companion of our creation
Fed pills of indoctrination now a doped and lobotomized nation

 

Society's reliance on compliance is the bee's destiny 
Behind the plan is man are we really free? 

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  • Priya Tomar

    Civilizational progress vs moral regression
    Deep philosophy, wisdom in every word
    Poetic power highly praiseworthy
    Lovely metaphors , well , very lovely
    Every word touched my heart

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you Priya for your review of this piece and your kind words of interpretation and support they are most appreciated.

      • Priya Tomar

        Very welcome to you , Soren

      • ElizabethMoroz

        Rich and vivid imagery with beautiful phraseology amidst an internal rhythmic structure that conveys a multitude of themes exploring the human condition, history, the nature of man & philosophy as well as devastatingly emotionally poignant reflections. Qudos on a beautiful piece. Sincerely, Elizabeth

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you Elizabeth for your read and supportive words they are very much appreciated

          • ElizabethMoroz

            My pleasure Soren

          • Teddy.15

            Wonderful filled with wisdom and imagery, you make it sound all so easy to explain in poetic form my dear sorrenbarret and I listen to every word loud and clear 🌹

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks so much Teddy for your review of this poem. Your words of encouragement are always most appreciated

            • Poetic Licence

              Deep thinking and meaning in this write reflecting onl civilisations progress or not as may be the case, I also felt alot of references referring to the darker times of the slave trade, enjoyed the read

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you for your review and take on this poem. We have come out of darkness into what we think is light but is it really or do we need to evolve further to see the light? I added two lines to make it a sonnet and complete the thought. Your words are always appreciated.

                • Poetic Licence

                  You are very welcome

                • arqios

                  Reading “light of progress” feels like stepping through time’s shadowed corridors. It begins in a shared darkness; humanity unified in vulnerability, then traces our inventions and inventions’ unintended chains. The poem’s sweep from primal intimacy to modern indoctrination strikes with urgent clarity. It invites us to question whether we can reclaim the tools we’ve forged.🕊️🙏🏻

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you Cryptic for the read and understanding its meaning, I just amended it with two lines to give it a sonnet finish and final thought of destiny.

                    • arqios

                      Just today during my shift, a coworker had shared about a bee buzzing in and around their hair! Now the sonnet shall live forever in my thoughts.

                    • jim56

                      love this beautifully written beautiful words
                      nice lovely flow nice to read jim

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you so much for reading Jim your words of encouragement and support are deeply appreciated

                        • jim56

                          your very welcome

                        • Lorenz

                          Are all our creations but vain companions of illusions ?

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Indeed but so true. Thani you lorenz for the review and words of encouragement.

                          • Tony36

                            Great write

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you Tony

                              • Tony36

                                You're welcome

                              • Tony Grannell

                                Hello Soren,

                                From the naked ape to the clothed obedient; unable to function without the pills of survival and the shackles of fake liberties in a plastic society. As powerful as it is excellent and brilliantly composed. Very well done indeed, my fine fellow.

                                Wishing you the very best,

                                Tony.

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you so much Tony I appreciate your words of support they mean a great deal

                                • Goldfinch60

                                  We are only free if we think outside the box and trust our own freedom soren.

                                  Andy

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thank you so much Andy your read and comments are always most appreciated. Yes freedom is in the mind as long as it has not been fooled



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