Notice of absence from Poetic Licence
GRATIAS AGO TIBI.
GRATIAS AGO TIBI.
Soldiers Remorse.
The soldier ran towards him pointing the gun at his head.
Go on shoot me I would be much happier if I was dead.
Look at the devastation and destruction your army has left.
The soldier looked, apologised, turn the gun round then
shot himself instead,
Tobani July 2025
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Self reflection may be the only way to stop violence that resides in all of us, physical, perbal, psychological, spiritual. We all find it easy to dehumanize and blame others but a mirror is hard to look into. A wonderful write and metaphor Tobani
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You are most welcome have a great day yourself
BRAVO
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I have to piggyback off of Soren Barrett because he is so correct. I have never piggybacked on anybody in my life. Well, what wonderful writing in a short poem! Your poem "Soldiers Remorse" explores the profound psychological impact of war on soldiers and the moral dilemmas they face. It highlights the burden of guilt and the devastating consequences of violence, culminating in a tragic act of self-harm as a form of remorse.
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Hello, Tobani,
Short, sharp, shock and straight to the reader's senses in an outstanding verse. The complete and utter trauma of soldiers in the heat and heart of battle losing all sense of who and why they are in the prison of ptsd, their only way out, by their own hand. Very well done indeed.
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Tony.
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"Two wrongs don't make a right," yet this fairly encapsulates in a nutshell why I still don't bother with that instrument. Beautifully rendered in deeply poignant brevity with gorgeous imagery. Thank you very much for sharing.
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You likewise, Sir.
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In this short but sharp poem you highlighted trauma faced by soldiers....
Nicely done.
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Makes a bullet-like point very well. I think soldiers are torn apart psychologically, let alone in other ways.
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I have seen similar unexpected (but not quite as extreme behaviours occurring) and without any warning shots or other indications being apparent before the event .. furthermore, I am very impressed by todays offering .. Neville
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Powerful
Thank you Thomas, very much appreciated
Well documented, or perhaps apocryphal, or somewhere between the two are accounts of solders deliberately failing to shoot combatants on the other side.
Same idea, yours expressed in more stark but effective poetic form, Tobani - good stuff.
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Best if the Leaders of these Countries put the Cloves on and fought it out . Leave out the Middle Man and Innocents. Good Write.
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Sad words Tobani but could be very true.
Andy
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The realization of the hoorors of war. Very intersting. Well done.
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Tobani, this delivers hard in such few lines. It’s stripped down, bare...no escape hatch or easy answer. The final act isn’t redemption. Very powerful piece and a fave. 🌹👏
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You are most welcome! You too Tobani! 🖤♰🦇🪞🩸🕯️
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sad but true state of affairs - short but extremely relevant...well done
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you too - take care
I read it thrice. Humanity came to life. An excellent write 🙏
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