Secrets (Senryu)

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Now is the time.

Secrets.

 

You Vigorously protect Your Secrets

The Pressure of Silence Will Mount, Then

Your Secrets Will become Fear.

 

Tobani  June  2025

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  • sorenbarrett

    This poem contains a secret. In search of it I found it and it is in the last line. A fave

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    • arqios

      We have cloudy days and rain for over a week now. Wow! secrets do tend to breed a fearsome inner terror. Superb write.

      • Poetic Licence

        Someone's keeping it to themselves!!, thank you for your feedback have a lovely weekend

        • arqios

          Oh yah, most likely! A lovely weekend to you as well!

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            Thank you

          • ElizabethMoroz

            The last line is such a profound insight! So very true and pertinent. I love how brevity can be so powerful & effective. Very insightful & cleverly written. Elizabeth

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            • Bella Shepard

              And fear will keep you trapped in your secrets. Brilliant!!

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                Thank you, have a wonderful weekend

              • Tony36

                Excellent write

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                  Thank you, have a wonderful weekend

                  • Tony36

                    You're welcome

                  • Cheeky Missy

                    Hmm. What a piece for Friday, and of all Fridays, Xmas in July no less. Wow! Pack a punch so weighty, I'm intrigued. Excellently rendered with sheer mystique, lovely imagery, and a haunting, damning poignancy. Thank you for sharing.

                    • Poetic Licence

                      Yep its official countdown has begun!!!, thank you for your feedback, have a wonderful weekend

                    • Priya Tomar

                      Very nice.
                      Last line cleverly written.

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                        Thank you, hope you have a wonderful weekend

                        • Priya Tomar

                          You are most welcome.

                        • Tristan Robert Lange

                          Stark and potent, Tobani. The shift from silence to fear lands is soft but powerful, and that second line builds the tension perfectly. Truly, an excellent job, my dear friend. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛ A fave.

                          • Poetic Licence

                            Thank you kindly Tristan, I hope you have a wonderful weekend

                            • Tristan Robert Lange

                              You are most welcome, my friend.

                            • Friendship

                              Oh my god, so true. The secrets we keep do become our fear. The sad part is that 98% of my secrets aren't mine; they belong to others, and I've carried them all these years. And yet, they've been played against me over and over as threats, reversed back to me as if it was my fault or I caused it!

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                                Thank you for your feedback, very much appreciated

                              • Goldfinch60

                                That fear may pass Tobani and life will be good.

                                Andy

                              • Tony Grannell

                                Hello, Tobany,

                                The confessions priests must bear in silence, such secrets bust be a daily burden weighed down with their own secrets. You have defined the fear in a secret in a perfectly rounded verse. Excellent, my friend.

                                Fond regards,

                                Tony.

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