"Week in a Wink"
Mon rocked up in trackies,
Tim Tams for tea,
By Tues the kookas
were laughin’ at me.
Wens the streets glistened,
still damp underfoot,
but hope wore her sandals
and kicked off the soot.
Fri slid past quiet,
Sat hit with a thud,
Sun blazed in gold
and lit up the mud.
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Author:
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- Published: August 17th, 2025 03:54
- Comment from author about the poem: Snappy enough to scroll past and still cop a chuckle. Hopefully this crispier take will be easier to understand; else, we have to loan Fido from Orchidee ๐๏ธ๐๐ป
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- Users favorite of this poem: Cheeky Missy, Tristan Robert Lange, Damaso, RSM0812, Eugene S., GenXer Shamrocker โ๏ธ
Comments16
This took me back to my childhood and rhymes of the days of the week. It has a little fun word play as well making it all the better. Nice Cryptic
Thanks Soren. It was fun to have a bit of play. And the last post would've helped as well. Have a great weekend๐๐ป๐๏ธ
You are most welcome Cryptic have a great weekend as well
Thank you ๐๏ธ๐๐ป
No need for Fido, a lovely piece of Fun, enjoyed the read
Haha, that is very assuring to hear. Thanks Tobani๐๏ธ๐๐ป
You are very welcome
Thanks for the Fave ๐คฉ @CM
Love how each day arrives with its own little cameo โ trackpants and Tim-Tams setting the mood, kookaburras as the weekโs chorus, hope literally striding in to clear the muck. The quick, breezy rhymes make it feel like flipping through a weekโs worth of Polaroids, ending on that perfect contrast of gold and mud. Itโs got that winkโandโwave tone that makes you want to read it aloud. And we hope reading it aloud is enjoyable! ๐๏ธ๐๐ป
It was very enjoyable reading it aloud!
No scrolling past by me...loved every movement through the week. What a wonderfully creative and poetic way to tackle the week! Love it, mon! We be jammin' here! ๐คฃ A fave from me, dear friend! ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ๐ฆโโฌ
Must be nice to hear Kookaburras first thing.
Enjoyed.
There are days..., saw one this morning on the drive to school drop offs. But they can be loud and persistent.
that BIG smile you just lent me is now a broad smile .. write across my face sidewards with the ends curled up at each corner .. nice one squire ..
Hoping they aren't lent but gifted ๐๐ป thanks Nev๐๏ธ
Come in, Fido, please, and explain....! lol.
What to do without Fido, we all need a Fido!๐๏ธ๐๐ป
Dear, arqios,
This is lovely, it reads like a skipping rope ditty - the last two lines, a gem - a gem in the mud, that is. As I said, Lovely and then some.
Fond regards,
Tony.
Sloshing in mud is fun and cleaning up after is refreshing! Thanks Tony๐๏ธ๐๐ป
Thanks for the Fave ๐คฉ @Damaso
Clever take, amusing. Well done.
...thanks Dan, most appreciated๐๏ธ๐๐ป
This poem has a great beat and rhyme shceme. Nice job.
Glad to hear that! That's made my day. Thanks kindly. ๐๏ธ๐๐ป
Good fun write argios.
Andy
Thanks for the Fave ๐คฉ @Eugene S.
understood, appreciated and enjoyed...
Thank you dear Safina๐๏ธ๐๐ป
you are most welcome - have a productive day
You too! ๐๏ธ๐๐ป
Is Monday washing day?
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