"Week in a Wink"
Mon rocked up in trackies,
Tim Tams for tea,
By Tues the kookas
were laughin’ at me.
Wens the streets glistened,
still damp underfoot,
but hope wore her sandals
and kicked off the soot.
Fri slid past quiet,
Sat hit with a thud,
Sun blazed in gold
and lit up the mud.
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Author:
crypticbard (Pseudonym) (
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- Published: August 17th, 2025 03:54
- Comment from author about the poem: Snappy enough to scroll past and still cop a chuckle. Hopefully this crispier take will be easier to understand; else, we have to loan Fido from Orchidee ποΈππ»
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Comments18
This took me back to my childhood and rhymes of the days of the week. It has a little fun word play as well making it all the better. Nice Cryptic
Thanks Soren. It was fun to have a bit of play. And the last post would've helped as well. Have a great weekendππ»ποΈ
You are most welcome Cryptic have a great weekend as well
Thank you ποΈππ»
No need for Fido, a lovely piece of Fun, enjoyed the read
Haha, that is very assuring to hear. Thanks TobaniποΈππ»
You are very welcome
Thanks for the Fave π€© @CM
My pleasure, you're very welcome.
Love how each day arrives with its own little cameo β trackpants and Tim-Tams setting the mood, kookaburras as the weekβs chorus, hope literally striding in to clear the muck. The quick, breezy rhymes make it feel like flipping through a weekβs worth of Polaroids, ending on that perfect contrast of gold and mud. Itβs got that winkβandβwave tone that makes you want to read it aloud. And we hope reading it aloud is enjoyable! ποΈππ»
It was very enjoyable reading it aloud!
No scrolling past by me...loved every movement through the week. What a wonderfully creative and poetic way to tackle the week! Love it, mon! We be jammin' here! π€£ A fave from me, dear friend! πΉπ€ππ―οΈπ¦ββ¬
haha! thanks T!
You are welcome, my friend!
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Must be nice to hear Kookaburras first thing.
Enjoyed.
There are days..., saw one this morning on the drive to school drop offs. But they can be loud and persistent.
that BIG smile you just lent me is now a broad smile .. write across my face sidewards with the ends curled up at each corner .. nice one squire ..
Hoping they aren't lent but gifted ππ» thanks NevποΈ
Come in, Fido, please, and explain....! lol.
What to do without Fido, we all need a Fido!ποΈππ»
Dear, arqios,
This is lovely, it reads like a skipping rope ditty - the last two lines, a gem - a gem in the mud, that is. As I said, Lovely and then some.
Fond regards,
Tony.
Sloshing in mud is fun and cleaning up after is refreshing! Thanks TonyποΈππ»
Thanks for the Fave π€© @Damaso
Clever take, amusing. Well done.
...thanks Dan, most appreciatedποΈππ»
This poem has a great beat and rhyme shceme. Nice job.
Glad to hear that! That's made my day. Thanks kindly. ποΈππ»
Good fun write argios.
Andy
Thanks for the Fave π€© @Eugene S.
understood, appreciated and enjoyed...
Thank you dear SafinaποΈππ»
you are most welcome - have a productive day
You too! ποΈππ»
Is Monday washing day?
Only when the sun is out!
Aye in a wink, or as I rather phrase it, "..in a blink." I love how this trips along gaily short and sweet with a waltzing sense of rhythm in tow. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a delightful poignancy. Thank you so very much for sharing.
Ah, the joy! Best keep at it as long as we can. Thanks too.
You're very welcome!
Thanks for the Fave π€© @Jainesh D. ποΈππ»
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