A crack, a scratch, a mar, a defect, from a fall now dented
A lack, a patch, a scar, reject from a brawl how lamented
Once new unblemished, a dream shiny, untarnished and so bright
Where few embellished, a scheme, unvarnished treason and a blight
Forfeited prize, now something to despise a broken trophy
Image spoiled love soiled, defiled no longer holy
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I know I'm wrong but I see this as people discarding items and people just because they are not perfect, instead of seeing beauty in everything, enjoyed the read
Thank you for the read Tobani. Don't be so sure you are wrong the issue of people certainly fits well. You words are always appreciated
You are very welcome
Good write, sorenbarette. This gem covers a lot of bases.
Thank you Jerry yes it can be taken many ways. Your words are most appreciated
Sorry about misspelling your name. I will now have to write it 100 times on the blackboard.
That is okay there are several variations on the name that came out of Ireland with Berrett to England Barrett with other variations along the way. Put the blackboard away they are all white boards now days due to political correctness in reverse.
Your poem "Broken" explores the theme of loss and the impermanence of beauty, reflecting on how something once pristine can become tarnished and undesirable due to life's struggles and conflicts. It explores the feelings of regret and melancholy associated with deterioration, both physical and emotional. The metaphor of a broken trophy symbolizes dreams or relationships that have been damaged or diminished over time. I relate to the human experience of feeling flawed or defeated after facing challenges.
Thank you friendship for your review of this piece and its interpretation. Yes you have hit upon the main points I had in mind when writing this piece. Your words are most appreciated
You're very welcome, Sorenbarrett
Going through life without scars would be boring. I have mental and physical scars, I cherish it all. Another wonderful theme my dear sorrenbarret 🌹
Thank you Teddy for your review and words of understanding of this poem. It is most appreciated
This covers so many things: like a Victorian Swimsuit. Good Write.
Thank you so much Kevin for your read and comments it is most appreciated
A fine write SB. I'm horrible in saying - Ahhh, a super list of things to give to KP for Ch......! lol. Woof! You don't really mean it, says Fido to me.
I recite that magpie thingy to her, but it goes: One for sorrow, two for sorrow, three for sorrow, etc. hehehe.
Thanks so much Orchi for your read and fun words of comment they always make the day
I think the last line perfectly embodies the message of this poem. Grea Write
Thank you so much for the read and understanding of this poem it is deeply appreciated
The pleasure is mine. Have a Great day!
In writing the metaphor " broken trophy" you spent your literary treasure.
Nothing is permanent.
In fact, we have to embrace death in order to live.
Trophies are just for this life like a popcorn is just for the movie. Thanks so much for the read and interpretation it is most appreciated
Wear your scars (physical, mental and emotional) with pride. Afterall they're a huge part of making you who you are.
Thank you so much for the read and comment it is deeply appreciated
But they can all be put in the past soren and we can move on into a better life from the experience gained.
Andy
Thank you Andy indeed we can and would be far better off if we do. Thanks for the read and kind words they are as always most appreciated
Weren't we once all so beautiful? So perfect before life's weather tainted our own? But isn't it lovely to see a naturally-made pearl, imperfect and lumpy...the bumpy pumpkins are certainly my favorite, and shattered glass is so lovely to look at
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