Tendrils of rain in rivlets of pain fall from cloud's misty eye
They send chills that stain and muddy the brain with transparent dye
Though the torrents may wane, marks remain even after they dry
So to complain it would be in vain time a new coat to buy
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Oh boy I have bought many new coats over years, enjoyed the read
Thank you Tobani I deeply appreciate your read and comment. I too have worn many coats each for different weathers and some have remained preferred
You are welcome
Words flowing like aquarella in autumn !
Thank you Lorenz it is appreciated
What struck me here, Soren, is how the rain you describe doesnโt just fallโฆit seeps in, leaves its trace, and refuses to vanish. The rhyme gives it an easy flow, but the truth beneath it lingers heavy. Strong work, my friend. ๐น๐ค๐๐ฏ๏ธ๐ฆโโฌ
Good write SB. I didn't buy KP a new coat. I gave her an old boot instead! lol.
She bought a new dress too. I said' What's that old sack you're wearing, dear?' heehee.
Thanks so much Orchi for the read and comment was that dress made of burlap?
Yes lol. I told her it would promote her humility - which of course, she needs to improve on! lol.
If that's the case sackcloth would have worked better
'Tendrils of rain" give life to it. As though it was on the attack. That is exactly how it feels. Glad there came a new resolve at the end, but the rain may have other ideas. - Phil A.
Thanks Phil for the read and words of support they are most appreciated and valued.
Stunning metaphor and imagery, yes ditch the old coat and wipe your eyes my dear friend. Gorgeous. ๐น
Thank you very much Teddy for the encouragement and words of support it is most appreciated
Could do with plenty of Rain at the moment in Europe by all accounts.
Good one.
Th anks so much for the read and comment it is appreciated
That new coat would cover the pain soren.
Andy
Indeed it would thank you Andy for your review and kind words they are appreciated
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