Driving along the roadway
With joy in my heart,
A man was there before me
Looking rather smart.
His thumb he held asunder
Looking for a gift,
I had no need to hurry
I gave him a lift.
We chatted with each other
As through miles we sped,
We spoke about our lifetimes
Many things were said.
He then asked a question
Which had come to mind,
“What if I were a killer
Of the serial kind?”
“That would be so unlikely”
I said with a smirk,
“Two serial killers in the car
Would not really work!”
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Author:
Goldfinch60 (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: August 26th, 2025 00:39
- Category: Humor
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- Users favorite of this poem: sorenbarrett, Cheeky Missy
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Comments5
Good write Gold.
Thanks Orchi.
It’s got that cheeky twist ending that completely reframes the ride you thought you were on. What starts as a wholesome roadside kindness drifts into campfire‑story territory, then flips into pitch‑black humour with the final punchline. The rhymes are simple and jaunty, which makes the sudden macabre reveal land even harder, a bit like a nursery rhyme walking into a crime novel. It’s playful, a little unsettling, and very self‑aware of the tropes it’s poking fun at. Almost like it’s winking from the rear‑view mirror as you realise you’ve been in on the joke the whole time. A pure joy! 🕊️🙏🏻
Your words are much appreciated Tik, thank you.
Andy
Andy you got me on this one had me going thinking about the people I give lifts to thumbing. I used to thumb as a kid and in all the rides I go only had one incident where the guy wouldn't let me out where I asked and had to walk an extra mile. My wife gives lifts to anyone that asks and even to some that don't. Yea bad things happen but to shut off charity for risk is a bad thing. But the humor in the last line left me laughing and that deserves a fave my friend
I don't see many hitchhikers nowadays soren not like I did many years ago. Thank you for your fine comments.
Andy
You are most welcome Andy no I don't either
Great write, Andy. I love a good twist with my morning coffee.
Glad you enjoyed your coffee Jerry, thank you.
Andy
This is well versified fun, Andy. Very much enjoyed. A fave.
PS Hitched often during my days as a poverty stricken youth...
Thank you Dave.
I don't see many hitchhikers nowadays.
Andy
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