Solo climbing

sorenbarrett

Set our pace as we climb from our base all fears in stone encase
There comes a place in climbing a cliff face, errors you can't erase
Loose rock displace, a thought retrace remembering only disgrace
The air embrace as you fall through space leaving not a trace

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  • orchidee

    A fine write SB.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Orchi appreciate the read.

    • Teddy.15

      Magnificent I was literally flying. 🌹

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you Teddy for your review and kind words of encouragement they mean a great deal. So nice to see you are back

      • Paul Bell

        Could be life in a line.
        It doesn't matter how much you prepare. If the outside force is against you, it's against you.
        Best laid plans and all that. This is why I delegate.

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you very much for the read and comment Paul it is most appreciated

        • arqios

          This one really captures the stark beauty and danger of climbing, Soren; every line feels like it’s balanced on the edge of a slip. I like how the fall at the end isn’t just physical but existential, like disappearing into nothingness. It reads less like a sport and more like a metaphor for taking risks in life where one wrong move can erase everything. 🕊️🙏

          • sorenbarrett

            Thank you Cryptic for the read and comment. So glad that the metaphor came through. I am not a climber but I have watched some and what they do is much the same as risks I and others take in life.

            • arqios

              Most welcome, Soren.

            • Tristan Robert Lange

              My friend, I’ve felt that too…that moment when control gives way, and all that’s left is gravity and grace. You capture it with beautiful precision. Well done, and Happy Halloween, my friend! 🎃👻🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you Tristan for the read and comment so glad that you caught the point about control and its loss and the issue then gravity takes its course. And a happy Halloween to you as well

              • Niki

                I enjoyed it well!!

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you so much for the read and kind words Niki it is most appreciated

                • Kevin Hulme

                  Reads like a Metaphor for living from day to day.
                  Good one.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks so much Kevin I appreciate the read and comment

                  • Rocky Lagou

                    The sibilance in this poem has me stressing the “s” of every word I’m saying now. It’s lingering ahhh!!! I love it!

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thank you Rocky for the read and comment so glad to hear from you.

                    • Goldfinch60

                      We must all watch our steps as we go through life soren.

                      Andy

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you so much Andy appreciate the read and words of caution. It is true one must be careful where one steps

                      • Aman 12

                        Chalked hand writing on granite..both tense and sparse.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you so much Aman for the review and words of encouragement. Yes sometimes one climbs one's goals with only chalk and by oneself and in the process may loose their grip and fall, sometimes in love that may be terminal.

                        • Aman 12

                        • GenXer Shamrocker ☘️

                          Solo climbing is by no means easy. A very well written piece

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you so much for your review and comment. Yes in a way we are all solo climbing through this life.

                          • rebellion_in_sanity

                            Just beautiful. Lines like all fear in stone encase or errors you can't erase carry a heavy existential theme but with surprising simplicity. Great work

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you so much Rebellion for the review and encouragement in such kind words of support.



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