Can you count to five?
Wot about a seven too -
Could you manage five?
Form pointless? No! It circumvents rational thought.
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Doggerel Dave (Pseudonym) (
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That one nails it.
That, Soren should go on record as the shortest contribution you have ever made anywhere....I think.... and none the worse for it...
I was trying to think of a haiku to respond with then said oh what the hell.
Better you didn't - I have a feeling there might be a plethora of haikus rolling off the lines soon... already? I spy with my little eye...
The funny thing about haiku is that it was developed and apt for Nihongo, having been anglicised has made it a somewhat different animal altogether. 🙏🕊️
Yes the form, the translation between two vastly different cultures and languages is questionable, I feel. To take the English equivalent form and use it occasionally in the world of poetry as some kind of condiment seems possible (is) for me, but over reliance on it as poetry’s view of the world or relationships or any other topic is just plain avoidance of commitment or commentary or anything much else…
I've found that visiting and immersing in the orient, like in Japan itself has brought some depth, texture, grasp and handle of the form which both makes it more enjoyable and questionable as you have so aptly expounded. It is A view strewn in a myriad of other equally valid views. This offering here embodying the prudent use of the form for its desired effect. 🕊️🙏
You have the advantage of me there. I can only view it from an English (my only language) perspective. I like it occasionally, but let's not hang about or linger too long.🙏 - you too.
Imagine a life
Without the words that you write
Would lead you nowhere.
I write many haikus and senryus Dave.
Andy
Are you offended then, Andy?
Not at all Dave, it is what people think about many things. As I say to people about music, there are only two types of music, music you like and music that you don't like. The same can be said about all forms of art and writing.
Andy
That’s a relief, Andy. As you can probably apprehend, this piece was both a a general exploration of my reservations with respect to this form in English and a critique of its over use here when there are so many other issues and complexities in this world. Let’s face it, these cannot be examined or defined in three lines of limited syllable lengths. Further, you do not exclusively use this form but vary your output considerably.
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And you, Sir.
Good write D. I though ya was sneezing there - Ha-choo!
Sneezing? I don't get the reference. (no it really is OK , officers - please don't take him away - I can deal with him with sufficient equanimity - it is, after all, not his fault...)
I keep taking the tablets.......... to try to avoid NS situations!
Very wise, orchi - deep in the recesses of your convoluted mind an element of perspicacity still lingers.
Well I thought it was some foreign sneeze - a Haiku/Hai-choo! lol.
I don't know I had any perspic-wotsit in me mind - whatever that is!
There is no requirement that you are aware of your hidden talent, orchi,- in fact it is probably better that you remain unconscious of it's power as it may reduce your spontaneity....
thankfully can count upto both 5 and 7
hope all well with you..
take care and have a productive week, and keep coming up with these queries ....makes me sit and think what it actually is about, and am still clueless
Thanks for the call. I meant to respond to your current post, However the issue surrounding this (see adjacent pins) had kept me preoccupied...
Ha!
Yeh - in a nutshell.
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