Renewal

sorenbarrett

Time steps the coast of morning, sweat brings the heat of day
Waves sound a resounding warning before twilight takes you away
Come ride the winds of a storm, along the shores of desire
Tides of fortune transform hope's dawn into evening's dying fire
Spread the sacrificial blood of sun's death over drowsy calm seas
Then with dark liquid breath revive the kiss of the breeze
Lift aurora's veil wiping dewdrop tears from night's eyes
See sky's face pale behind clouds of celestial disguise

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    Most descriptive and much enjoyed

  • David Wakeling

    Very powerful images here. From tides and ocean waves to sacrificial blood. Sounds like my 21st.Just kidding.A wonderfully poetic piece.Enjoyable

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much David I deeply appreciate your review and words of encouragement

    • Lorenz

      A watercolorist who captures the ever-changing nuances of words over time and seasons...

      • sorenbarrett

        It is water that makes the ink flow. Thanks for the review my friend

      • arqios

        This reading left me enjoying the thought of endings and losses being part of a natural cycle that from darkness comes rebirth and new beginnings.🕊️🙏

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks so much for reviewing it and your take on it. It is not only appreciated but applauded my friend

          • arqios

            Most welcome dear friend🕊️🙏

          • Paul Bell

            Record tempertures in Britain, some are now praying for dewdrops.
            Seemingly we can't live without the rain in a country that prays for the sun.

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks Paul for the read and comment. Yes we always need a balance.

            • orchidee

              A renewing good write SB.

              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks so much Orchi it is most appreciated

              • Teddy.15

                Dearest sorrenbarret another beautiful vision. 🌹

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you so much Teddy I do so much appreciate your regular reads and kind comments they are deeply valued

                • Kevin Hulme

                  Very descriptive as always. A Painting by Turner came to mind. Good Write .

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you Kevin for the read and most generous words of encouragement they are most appreciated

                  • Tristan Robert Lange

                    Soren, this feels vast and elemental. The whole poem moves like a tide between creation and dissolution, dawn and dusk, life and death. There’s something almost mythic in the way the natural world becomes a living ritual here. Beautiful work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thank you so much Tristan for your review it is most inspiring itself and deeply appreciated my friend

                    • Goldfinch60

                      Wonderful words and descriptions soren.

                      Andy

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you so much Andy for the read and comment as always it is most appreciated

                      • GenXer Sharon 🙏🍀

                        Summertime vibes! Beautifully written!

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thanks so much Sharon your comment is most appreciated



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