A Taste of Freedom
The gulls are all
going crazy
both in the sky
and the recently
smart bomb
ploughed fields
and factories
that as yet
remain standing
behind my
old banked barn ..
There must be
something going
on back
there surely
to make them all
behave like
starving children ..
Each having
found their own
convoluted
route to freedom
and their
sudden release
from hungry ghettos ..
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Author:
Neville (
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- Comment from author about the poem: if this works I would like to express my sincere thanks to all who showed interest and or concern regarding my previous post and in particular to Julian who responded like the Tsar of all Administrators .. Cheers one & all .. Neville
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I am so glad to hear this worked I put in my two cents Nevil and imagine many others did as well for it would never do to silence such a voice. Unless deluded this is a brilliant subliminal poem of war. Where the calm of a farm is split with the attack of gulls ( not Mongols) and the clever use of bombing (which gulls do on the field below) the mention of factories still standing and then the mention of starving children. This war although visible from the attacking point of view remains hidden behind our barn and we have to ask what is going on back there that causes all this. A great metaphor my friend and a fave.
That was very kind and very much appreciated .. Many thanks .. and I am sincerely grateful you stopped by here today .. or yesterday that is .. or was .. Neville
My pleasure my friend
Glad it worked. For me VPN prevents some sites from loading and others won't load without it. Crazy tech days/almost a couple of years now.
I just learnt summat very important .. cheers .. Neville
The gulls have laced my work for their cries, hanging out in Midwest parking lots as if they....what? Had a place in paved paradise?! Lovely to see your work afresh in all its beauty. Thank you very much for sharing.
Thanks tons for stopping by & the support you have shown throughout this particular venture .. Neville
u really got such a nice beautiful way of expressing. so wondrful
How very kind .. Thank you .. Neville 😎👍
I need t ignore the war (far too much of it about lately). I'm here to let you know that over the last ten years, the birds have disappeared round my way (predates avian flu). However my partner (forty mins drive away is overwhelmed with pigeons, lorikeets and cockatoos. Mind you, she does lay tributes out there, though at times these are whipped out of her hand before she has a chance to lay...Is this the kind of response you hoped for, or am I rambling.....?
I have no objection to rambles Dave .. feel free to ramble on .. 40 mins tho' surely not that's more like a marathon without a peanut in sight .. 😎👍
Good write 403 - arggh! The message no one wants to see. 403 I mean, not your poem. Fido says to me 'You better stop; you're digging yourself into a big hole!' lol.
too late but ta anyway .. Neville
I'm replying from this hole that I've dug myself into! lol.
Yay!!!! Thank you to the Tsar of All Administrators for kicking the publishing gremlin out! Seriously, glad it got resolved and rock on Julian! Also, good to know if this
As for your poem, Neville, this is one powerful piece. I love how you begin with something as ordinary as gulls circling overhead, only to slowly reveal the deeper reality beneath the scene. That final image leaves freedom feeling both precious and painfully costly. Wonderful write, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
Thanks Tristan, I must confess I was overcome by the generosity and kindness shown by all you guys & of course the big man himself .. Neville
Powerful imagery and a statement that should make one sit up and think what we are coming to
Muchly appreciated my friend .. I couldn't ask for more .. Neville
Always enjoy reading your work- keep them coming ✌️💅
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