(sonnet attempt # VIII)
VIII
The trees are bare of golden leaves by now.
Their foliage so bright and gay lit life;
For under grey and low'ring skies a strife
'Twixt cheerful, carefree, lazy summer how
Best winter's deadly chill and frozen brow
Could ever subtly unseen bury life
Acceptably 'gainst all creation's cries---
(Since spring would bring renewal all around)
Was waging war in all the hearts that love,
Who shrinking from its deadly prison sighed
And longingly for love's true promise sought
Reprieve from winter's death......they looked above:
And brightly golden flutt'ring lit the skies----
For love burned brightest as his chains he wrought!
26NOV10
"....for love is strong as death;...." Song of Songs 8:6b
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Author:
Chic George (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: November 27th, 2010 01:22
- Comment from author about the poem: So, if you had challenged me....I couldn't have done it. But he tempted me...with a compliment. And I could NOT resist. So I began innocently to compose.....and twenty minutes later....Voila! Now, a few questions.....Can a decent sonnet be composed in twenty minutes or less,....by an amateur? Is this in the Italian style? Does it make sense?
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Nice one. The imagery is there just as you show it with the picture. P.s Is the slowness problem through using reply. I just wrote to you but I am not sure if it sent. Let me know
Thanks alot for commenting and for that vote of favour! I much appreciate it......and as I see I have a message waiting....I can hardly wait to read and answer it!
i m still trying to unearth a few lines here......but i guess u broke the barrier of amateur poetry...its as beautiful as it can get
and i think the best comes in the least time...its flawless and the imagery is excellent...kudos
Thank you very much! Yea, that is why I seriously ask whether it makes sense, because the lines kept coming until it was finished, and looking at it finished, I was gleeful, but not confident that even I could make sense of it, so wondered whether it was disqualified as nonsense.
I can identify with poems relating to nature
With such a lovely setting
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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