Even then, the sun rises

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  dbremner January 9th, 2011 12:12

  Hi there, I've read this poem a few times through today, I like it very well, it says a great deal. This is my interpretation of it. I like the end two lines very much as it has an optimistic feel about it as well as a lot of reality. The sun indeed rises each day with or without us and I suppose it is better that it's 'with'.
  The 4th part of your poem also speaks to me of the awfull and weighty responsibility that falls upon us to make something of our lives and achieve something, particularly if we feel we should do so to live up to others peoples expectations of us. Often the 'closer' those people are to us the greater we feel the need to come up to their expectations, thereby increasing the weight of responsibility we have.
  
  The second part of part 2 (indeed all the poem up to that point) has me thinking of the common feeling that we fail compared to others, but I sometimes counter that in my mind by thinking that perhaps others are living in a degree of self-denial, maybe seeing material wealth as a mark of their 'sucess' for example. There are other examples of such self-denial.
  Anyway best wishes, I enjoyed your poem, this is only my interpretation of it which may be wildly different from yours. Incidentally your piece 'Existence' had a hand in my submission today!
  

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    Dolphine29February 13th, 2011 13:54

    Hi!!! Sorry for answering after such long time. But yes, you nailed it, I mean the interpretation that you have is very close of what I had in mind when I wrote this poem. I guess we should enjoy more of our existence instead of worrying to much of the legacy, but being honest and responsible on what we do, still life goes on.
    Thank you for the comment
    Best
    Vanny
    

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  Cheeky Missy January 9th, 2011 12:26

  Excellent.....you hit me where I am sitting right now, head in hands, wishing to cease existing, knowing I won't for all that is sickening me....watching the sun rise on others, even as I taste what I never dreamed....crumbling....my hopes as I perhaps misunderstand you, shattered, defeated....and yet the sun rises and the world goes round. I too hope, as you seem to say, to see it rise and be happy to greet it...but for the moment, the initial or entirety of this poem of yours expressed what I am struggling with. I quite appreciated it. Keep writing, as I saw you mentioned elsewhere, do keep pen and paper perpetually handy, and I look forward to more!

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    Dolphine29February 13th, 2011 14:21

    Thank you so much and sorry for the delay; well I am so glad that my poem has helped you in some way  and yes, you are right I want us to feel like even in our darkest moments, hope remains as the sun rises again.
    Best
    Vanny