I gave you the key to injure me,
And if you use it, what can I think?
But that, of course,....I gave you the key!
And what of my heart that beat for you?
I did acknowledge it could be fooled,
And that my dashed dreams I well could rue.
And all the hours I wasted on us?
Well, for the moment, it was such fun....
I will learn not to miss you so much.
For the great fool that it made of me?
I did not enter UNwittingly....
What can I say, chagrined though I be?
You taught me more about being in love,
Which makes me now miss what almost was,
....Perhaps that drawback's the greatest one.
If I disallow possibility,
Harden my heart so you can't hurt me,
I'll get nowhere, and have not a thing.
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Author:
Chic George (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Just thinking....am I entirely the victim, or, did I lend my heart to such demise of my happiness willingly? Further, if I don't take that chance of being hurt by loving, can I ever truly have love? Also, does this seem to be missing anything or cut short in idea? Any suggestions? I am open to consideration.
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it was nice..maybe a couple of more thoughts would make it better..just suggesting..i hope it's just ok with you..
Oh, thanks very much...I do appreciate the suggestion, seriously, but I am still short of ideas what else to add, while sensing perhaps it falls short. Thanks again very much!
Hi; I like the idea that u have it's sad but also has like a changelling point and that is important. Maybe it will help just closing your eyes and thinking about him and well just write without thinking of rhimes. It's amazing all that u can come out with from within.
Keep on!!! Best
D.
Thank you very much! So, let me try to understand,....you think it does need more but, that I will come up with more by not forcing a rhyme on it? Thanks again for your comment!
Well yeah I do, but just as a suggestion.
Best,
Dolphine
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two thumbs up!!
Wow. Thanks VERY much!!!
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