i call out to youyou dont say a wordi cry out your nameyou stab me with a sword
you say nothingi dont hear your voicei fall on my kneesknowing i have no choice
you have left mealone and so coldyou no longer warm meas i silently fold
into a black roseused and oldwith no placeto call home
i no longer feel youyou have gone awayits as if ive been leftand i have been replaced
i know you exist for i have heard you triceyou have a gentle voiceand i have left you twice
you finally gave up thoughfor your no longer herei am so sorry about what i didand i wish you were near
i know i am done you no longer careyou have gone your wayme and you will no loner share
our conversations our laughsour ways of having fun
but God i love you with all my heartim sorryfor doing what i did
i ask your forgiveness i ask for your wordi ask taht you simply say one word
BUT I GET NO ANSER!!!!!!!!!!!!! IM DONE,,,,,,,
you say nothingi dont hear your voicei fall on my kneesknowing i have no choice
you have left mealone and so coldyou no longer warm meas i silently fold
into a black roseused and oldwith no placeto call home
i no longer feel youyou have gone awayits as if ive been leftand i have been replaced
i know you exist for i have heard you triceyou have a gentle voiceand i have left you twice
you finally gave up thoughfor your no longer herei am so sorry about what i didand i wish you were near
i know i am done you no longer careyou have gone your wayme and you will no loner share
our conversations our laughsour ways of having fun
but God i love you with all my heartim sorryfor doing what i did
i ask your forgiveness i ask for your wordi ask taht you simply say one word
BUT I GET NO ANSER!!!!!!!!!!!!! IM DONE,,,,,,,
- Author: Lonelykaren (Pseudonym) ( Offline)
- Published: January 25th, 2011 14:05
- Comment from author about the poem: i got no answer i was tired of waiting i guess
- Category: Unclassified
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Comments2
interesting... i don't understand the sword stabbing part though in the first stanza lol. what does it mean? makes me wonder what the line "i am so sorry about what i did" means. so also, who left who? i like the energy. good poem.
Stab me with a sword. means that he practically ignoredme that it felt like i had been stabbed since it hurt so much. and
i am sorry about what i did means. that i feel bad that i did bad stuff tht i wasnt supposed to do. i cut, purged and starved myself because of the lonelyness i felt and how fat and ugly i also felt.
i did messed up things that i regret.
Hope thAT answers ur question. THanks for commenting..
It is excellently expressed...except that you seem to bounce from one character to another, for God never shares laughs or conversations and yet the poem concludes with waiting on Him. Then don't let impatience win the day, and don't dictate the response you expect....read in the Bible to see how God answers, who He answers, what, and when...while you are waiting...remember Daniel 9 and 10, Ps 105:4, John 9:31 and elsewhere....seek the Lord....evermore.
Thanks ill try.
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