It 'edited'


Just as slowly as a death walk,

‘It’ came to me with open arms

I was amazed; in a shock,

For ‘It’ was drawing me by its charm


‘It’ was dressed as a dove,

With a flower in its beak.

The very show of humility and love

She possessed me, I dispossessed myself.


‘It’ halted by me with her charismatic smile,

A beauty that I had never seen

I hadn’t seen it coming; thought it was a mile

Farther; now it had come to me.


There was strange feeling inside me

Of love, evasion and alarm

But ‘It’, so lovingly caressed me

Dominated me, controlled me.


Suddenly, I showed reluctance to go with ‘It’

I struggled, but it was futile-

I recognised Death was ‘It’,

And Death had come to take me.

  • Author: Quiller (Pseudonym) (Offline Offline)
  • Published: February 26th, 2011 08:32
  • Comment from author about the poem: I have edited the previously written poem 'It'... It conveys the same meaning as the previous one but conveys it in a better fashion...!
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Users favorite of this poem: Cheeky Missy, Emi, Cali Kittana.


  • Alexandre Landsley

    I love the was exceptional

    • SauravRHS

      Thank you.

    • Cheeky Missy

      Again, very nicely expressed.....only now you remind me of the Lord's warning in Proverbs about the adulterous woman and her prey......he knows not that the dead are there, and that her guests are in the depths of hell....her house the way to death, going down to the chambers of hell....none that go unto her return again, neither take they hold of the paths of life....Anyway. just some thoughts provoked by this latest version of "It"....creepy as ever!

      • SauravRHS

        Whoa! You seem to have a good knowledge about the Bible and stuff. Can you please please tell me some more things about this Bible stuff. I would love to read it... Can you please send them as a message? And thank you once again for your compliments.

        • Cheeky Missy

          Wow. You've never yet read the Bible? How I would love to give you one! Give me some time....I think I might be able to find you a copy online.....give me a few days, I've just made a quick and unsuccessful search right now, but I am sure I can find one for you, so give me a day or so to get some help. Here is a start:

          So far as I know, the KJV is the only Bible....all the others are perversions of it.

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