When you told me you no longer loved me
I slowly went out of my mind
I've been promised that all wounds will heal
if just given a little time
But whoever said that's mistaken
and nothing is further from true
Cause it's been awhile since you walked out
and girl I'm still in love with you
I thought that we had something special
had a bond that nobody could break
I guess I was just being foolish
and that wasn't my only mistake
But you broke my heart when you walked out
baby you broke it right in two
So I'll try to pick up the pieces
from still being in love with you
Sometimes my heart starts to hurting
and I'm wanting to cry out your name
But I know if I were to give in
I'd just be causing myself more pain
So I fight back all my emotions
but sometimes it's just so hard to do
No matter what my mind tries to tells me
girl I'm still in love with you
...........I wrote this in 2001...and borrowed the music of Best of Intentions by Travis Tritt for the flow ....so be gentle lol
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Thanks for sharing JEFF ~ strructurally this is a perfect poem Quatrains and a consistent rhyme pattern (xaxa ~ xbxb etc) and (because you based it on music) it flows like silk ! Thanks for your comment on my POETRY POEM. I love the pathos in your poem ~ I'm only 33 but I could have written your poem several time. I'm in a good relationship right now which aids the healing process ! Yours BRIAN
Its amazing how love can heal ...i have a poem that starts out: Faith may move a mountain...but only love can heal a heart. I've struggled with so many demons in this life...i often feel love was never meant for me...or peace of mind. Thank you for commenting Brian...you have no idea how much each one means to me
Quite a moving piece. Sad to read but flows nicely and so kind of makes me feel the resignation of the words through the flow of the poem. I like it. 👍
Thank you for your time and your comment....I certainly appreciate it
This poem is amazing, I can feel the emotion seeping out of the lines. Because you set it to music, the poem flows exceptionally well. Please please keep writing!
Thank you for your comment....I most certainly appreciate it
sometimes love hurts,great write
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AWESOME WRITE, emotional and well written
Thank you Tony I really appreciate all your comments
Welcome
Now a guy that likes Country music and writes like a song, what more could we ask for?
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beautiful
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I like this freestyle poem. Too bad you have a broken heart to go with it. Great job!
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you have literally written the story of my life. Thank-you!
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No problem.
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