Asking.

Fay Slimm.

 

Asking.

 

Then as the knots of love

we tightened,  

earth underneath us and

above us the sky,

we lay down to prove, in

matured twilight,

coupling's ripened delight

you and I.

Then we had to lose life's

much loved tie

with you beneath earth and

me asking why.

  • Author: Fay Slimm. (Offline Offline)
  • Published: January 17th, 2017 07:28
  • Category: Sad
  • Views: 75
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Comments10

  • BRIAN & ANGELA

    Thanks for sharing FAY ~ Elegant structure ~ but such a sad Subject. There is no answer to the question why one person ~ in a loving relationship is taken and the other left. Talking to the bereaved ~ those most able to cope say their strength (to go on) is in their Happy Memories and No Regrets. I figure that that is how it is with you ~ Every Blessing ~ BRIAN

    • Fay Slimm.

      Thank you dear Brian for your caring comment - - so true that happy memories can hold you aloft from the waters of sorrow. - I wrote this short verse just after the loss of someone held dear - but your thought of living without regrets is so very comforting - thank you indeed for this comment.

    • Sefrin

      What a beautiful read. These words can truly touch any heart.

    • WriteBeLight

      Very sweet remembrance and poignant question. I am sorry these kinds of questions ever have to be asked. Nicely done Fay.

      • Fay Slimm.

        Grateful thanks for the perceptive comment on that poignant question my friend. No answers to that one but one day I am sure we will understand.

        • WriteBeLight

          🙂

        • Christina8

          Beautiful poem! So sad to lose a love or friend and then to be left asking why. Great job!-Christina

          • Fay Slimm.

            Thank you for your expressive and caring comment Christina.

          • Augustus

            Beautifully done. Elegant style. Sorry for your loss. Hugs.

          • Pintu Mahakul

            Knot of love is tightened and emotion has flown from true heart. Proving this in twilight above sky is mesmerizing. Very beautifully penned love poem this is and this is interesting one.

            • Fay Slimm.

              Thank you for your perceptive comment Pintu my friend - I tried, in this short poem, to express how sudden loss of love to death often raises the question "Why" -

            • RAJ NANDY

              A great reflective poem Fay! You had been the leading poet of that disbanded Swedish poetry site - 'Poetfreak.com' for the last 6 years now! Though I had met you earlier in 'Poemhunter.com' initially. This site will benefit from your postings no doubt! God bless! - Raj, New Delhi, 24th Jan 2017

            • janetaylor

              fay you have truly touched my heart ~ the ending stuns and leaves one pondering why. lovely, beautiful words .

              • Fay Slimm.

                Yes dear friend we are lead to question why when a loved one has been so suddenly taken. Much appreciated your perceptive comment Jane.

              • Neville

                so very dad & more than.. N

                • Fay Slimm.

                  Sad has to fade for life to find happy again - wrote this long time back and have happy memories.............. thanks for your "more than" my friend.

                  • Neville

                    pleasure and am so glad you saw through my typo....

                  • L. B. Mek

                    heart wrenchingly raw in its relatability and subtly simplistic elegance,
                    what a moving read, so glad I found it



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