Mary

Ks24

I feel like I only fuck up

Like I am not satisfied with the satisfaction others get from me

I never try my best I'm only a quitter

All I want is to be happy with myself 

To be able to say I tried

To be able to prove my existence 

We are nothing 

We die

We are forgotten 

We are worthless

It is strange to find worth in another person

To actually care instead of only wanting to effect a brief moment of their pointless existence 

I want to be your worth

I want to be your reason for existing 

I want to look back on our seemingly pointless lives and only see each other and realize you are the only thing in my life that has worth 

I apologize for not knowing how to actually care 

You are the reason for my life and I will never feel like I am enough for you 

But to me that is love 

Two people forever trying to make each other happy 

Trying to be the others life and show you that it is not worthless 

I love you.

 

  • Author: Ks24 (Offline Offline)
  • Published: January 17th, 2017 07:51
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Tony36

    Great write

    • Ks24

      Thank you any criticism?

      • Tony36

        Welcome

      • Christina8

        Really great poem. Love is easy. Trying to make the other person happy, just like you wrote. You need to love yourself too. Just believe in yourself. Great job on this!

        • Ks24

          Thank you 😊

        • Aa Harvey

          I love this poem!

          I like the 'prove my existence' and the 'wanting to effect a brief moment of their pointless existence'' lines as well as all the other lines. I like the honesty that comes from the poem.

          You asked Tony36 'any criticism' and I have no criticism, but personally I would put a paragraph space (a gap between the two lines) after 'we are worthless' (I sometimes say 'we' when talking about myself) or 'prove my existence' depending on whether those lines are about you or a connection of feelings you share with another person.

          I would also add another paragraph space just before 'I love you' because the first paragraph is about you, the second is about You and them and 'I love you' I would let it stand alone, for emphasis.

          But it is your poem and it is wonderfully written.

          • Ks24

            Thank you and I appreciate the criticism a lot I don't know much about spacing tbh



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