Fay Slimm.

In Transit.

In Transit.


Jewelled with
rainbow translucence roll
rain-bead balls
slowly down outer-windows.

seed pearls, clear watery
glories slide
in uniformed lines, floorward.

Diamonds in
transit they shine and fire
sparkles from
each crystaline orb's inside.

Smallest gems,
if unnoticed, might seem
joining the fall into sheen.

Caught however
by eyes with keen poetic
insight rain-drop
wonder bequeaths an ode.  


  • janetaylor

    those keen poetic eyes caught and captured it with elegance and artful grace. beautiful and magical write.

  • Fay Slimm.

    Ah - - many thanks dear Jane - your comment came so quickly after the posting..... so pleased you enjoyed the read.


    Thanks FAY ~ I love your poem because you highlight one of the many properties and beauties of water ~ its ability and propensity to form drops. The majority of liquids do not do this ~ petrol for instance. The reason water does is because of its molecular structure and surface tension ~ which also explains why we can blow bubbles ~ why sap rises in plants and why solid water (ice) floats in liquid water ! Water drops on a cobweb are so like jewels. Also because water drops act like prisms each one contains its own rainbow. A scientific understanding of the nature of water drops ~ for me ~ does not lessen the wonder but only increases it. Thanks for causing us all to think !

  • rrodriguez

    This is remarkably well written. The descriptive prowess of the words convey the beauty of the water drops. Beautiful!


    Fay, your poetic metaphors and your unique style of composition, took me back to my student days a span of some 53 years, making me recall the poems of GM Hopkins, a devout Catholic & a Victorian poet; and his poems 'The Windhover', & 'Pied Beauty'. Your poem has reached that Classical stage I must admit! Thanks, - Raj, New Delhi.

    • Fay Slimm.

      You are so kind Raj - - I am so pleased you enjoyed this read.

    • ron parrish aka wordman

      a lovely write fay

    • Neville

      magical & true...

      • Fay Slimm.

        Thank you so muchly for your visit and comment. ..... welcome and more....

        • Neville

          my pleasure..

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