I'm Screwed

Naeners

Bitter sweet
I'm in too deep
Her hair
Her eyes
The way she looks at me
She's not in love
But I sure am
Damn

I'm screwed

  • Author: Naeners (Offline Offline)
  • Published: March 17th, 2017 23:07
  • Comment from author about the poem: Just a little short story poem I wrote and thought was cute. Please tell me what you think. Constructive criticism is always welcomed.
  • Category: Unclassified
  • Views: 29
  • User favorite of this poem: k_dovexo.
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Comments6

  • JJCooke

    I enjoy it! Fun to read 🙂

  • Goldfinch60

    Good write, it says so much in so few words.

  • Frank Prem

    Yes indeed. Sound assessment. Good work.

    Cheers,

    Frank

  • Michael Edwards

    Well I've looked at this trying to find some constructive points to make but I can't. A superb piece as it stands- short succinct and it really grabs.

  • k_dovexo

    Love this

  • Garry

    Short, vivid and powerful.
    Short is good, i think. Poetry is using the right words in thd right order. Ifvyou do this you shouldn't need many.



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