WAS IT LOVE?
She looked forward with new hope.
What did her eyes see?
Was it love?
His face displayed contentment.
Were his dreams answered?
Was it her?
He moved slowly towards her.
Would she reach for him?
Was she there?
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Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I've just drafted Part 4 but not sure about the last line - Its not that easy in 3 syllables - but I'll get there. Plus another watercolour.
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We will find out, may be tomorrow.
Like the painting very much. Did you save your ear?
Actually working on it at the moment - it will be 6 stanzas long and all summed up in the final one but not quite sure how. Still got two ears...!
What I am finding a bit odd is stating out with something not knowing where it will end up - usually when writing a poem I have an idea of the ending, or the overall concept, and then work towards it - this one is all the wrong way round especially having committed myself by publishing the early stanzas.
Thanks Goldfinch.
Hi Michael, many times I sit down to write a poem and the ending that I had first thought of changes into a different one while I am writing. One of my poems that I wrote several years ago, not put up on the site yet, confused me as to this day I do not know where the last verse came from but all I can remember is tears streaming down my face as the words went onto the page.
Writing poetry can be very emotional both at the time of writing and years later when it is read again.
I know exactly what you mean as I am much the same when it comes to emotion. I sometimes have to leave the room if there's someone else around. When working I used, among other things, to give talks, lecture, give interviews on tele and radio, and chair international conferences in London and it never phased me one bit. But when my parents passed away I just couldn't speak as I would have been blubbering all over the place - I have felt guilty ever since but the consolation is that I know they will understand.
Sometimes I will have the last line of a poem and build the poem from there, but I also just start sometimes with no idea where it will finish. I am looking forward to the next verse. Phil.G
Next verse tomorrow - see you then!
Awesome poem Michael...
Thanks for looking in
I sure hope they are looking at each other! 🙂
I shall not give the game away but just wait - I've penned it all now in between painting picture frames and cutting the lawn. now of to evening meal.
Very nice poem. I'll tune in tomorrow! Very nice watercolor!
Thanks Christina.
Very good, developing well. Love the watercolours.
cheers Garry
Like a dream
Perhaps it is Augustus - we may never know.
I have a million questions, as I'm sure some of your other readers do as well: Who are they, where are they, do they know each other, is this their first time meeting, are they a couple, etc.?
Can you answer them all in just three more stanzas? I hope so. - Phil A.
Ah perhaps the enigma continues despite the resolution in episode 6. Thanks so much Phil - our clocks went forward this weekend so although Im awake at my usual time the time difference means I can't post the next episode for another half another hour.
beautiful sentiment,i read all 3
Thanks wordman - No 4 just published
can't wait I'll read 4&5 now
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